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I want to be real
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I want to be real |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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*I am going against my personal policy of posting only one poem a day because this has just come to me and I want to "expose" myself. I know the timing is wrong and I hope it doesn't bring more tears to any, But since you are crying, sighing anyway... I want to be real daddy A real good girl for you And do all the secret things That you ask me to I want to be real daddy Really, really sweet So I can get a boyfriend To worship at my feet I want to be real daddy Don't hold me now to you I want to fly so high and free Not do the things I do I want to be real daddy Not softly fade away Was it real good for you daddy? You took my innocence away I want you to help me feel daddy Not tied alone to you I wanted only to be real Was I real nice for you? I wanted to be real daddy Not some shadowed form Now life lived in the shadows Seems not so forlorn One day I will be real daddy Will cast off your net of pain And walk within the sunshine And learn to live again Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown [This message has been edited by Kethry (07-13-2002 11:10 PM).] |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Keth, I'm glad you did post this. It really pulls the heart strings. No tears, just lots of sighs. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart sister and healer of nights fears, your writing is always superb and this is no exception. The tears this brings you have fallen like diamonds on these blue pages and have tugged at my heartstrings. Always you shine darling girl and always your words stir the touch of selfthat lives still in us all. I love this utterly utterly it is beautiful and it’s presentation is perfect. I love this absolutely love it, well done, beautifully written. And yes it is exceptional in its content. Excellent writing here as always  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Giving our children wings to fly isn't as easy as it sounds. It's like coming full circle, looking back when we were the ones flying away, now we're the ones waving and letting them go. Hope I didn't miss the message here. Nice write Kethry~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Kethry, you are indeed a wonderful friend and I know your father is so lucky to have a wonderful daughter like you and all he wishes for is for you to be happy! (smiles) I understand how you feel about posting and once I used to post many poems a day and now I try posting one evety two to three days but whenever something wonderful comes to my ind I always post that too! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Obviously I haven't been clear so I will edit and try again. *soft smiles* Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Keth...this is a beautifully written poem and I am not sure if I caught your meaning, but it does appear to be about parental abuse. It does make me cry  ~ hugs and tearsLyra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lyra, it is about parental abuse of a specific kind. thank you for catching my meaning. *HuGS* Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved heart sister and writer of life’s truths and pain, I got the message loud and clear. And did you or did you not tell me NOT to telegraph the poems deep and frightening meaning to the people who came after me? MMmmmm? Beloved heart I can’t hear you? That was a little admission was it not? Of course darling heart it was. I’ll forgive you because I love you, but for no other reason at all! Well okay because you are a brilliant writer, and because you’ve written this well, incredibly well. A deeply disturbing subject and yet you’ve managed to explain it’s meaning without being too graphic. Love you always Love and warm stuff As always Slushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Keth? You are very much alive, lady. And very real. You have true dignity, m'friend. And I am proud to call you friend. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You are VERY real and this one does pull at the emotions in us. You have revealed alot here and put much up to public viewing in sharing this. Very emotional and very delicately put are your words. Enjoyed the read even in light of the circumstance of it's birth. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, how awful to have experienced such a thing. But you are real, and we all know it. And you are evidently very strong, also. Hugs Sandra |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A lot of truth, but a lot more strength in sharing, Keth. You know this. You also know the superhuman effort it took to bring it forth, and for going on. I wish I could say, put it behind you, but only you will know how, and when, to do so. In the meantime, I will admire you for your many strengths, pray with you through the weak times, and appreciate your poetry, always. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I believe you expressed the thoughts from you heart on this subject very well...take care...James |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lynne Your words were so heartfelt and I am so glad you put your feelings on paper. Your pain was so very evident and I wish you well. I am also proud to be writing alongside an Aussie mate who gives so much of herself. Take care.....Sue I am in motion |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Keth....Seriously...I did get that meaning the first time I read this.....A powerful emotional write.....so glad you posted!.....Heavy on my heart for you or the party involved.......Love to ya! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't know how this read before or what edits you made... but in its present form, the meaning is gut-wrenchingly inescapable... just as so many situations are for so many. This is powerful and painful and the type of poem that should never have to be written... but you wrote it very well. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
your poetry is very well written and it communicates very deeply the the issues and pain of this type of abuse - hard poem to read due to the subject but poetry is often a window on the soul - Paul |
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