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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Allure Allure ... resting in the alacrity of mesmerized breeze Captured early moments in pillowed desires to please Cherished futures ride the wings of erupting dreams Clouding spheres of fortune in yawn of dawn beams Lyrics of innocence dance in velvet curtains of sleep Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep Cradled embrace tossed in throes of tangled thought Stretch to the warming rise of imaginations caught Yearn of learn sparkles in first kiss of morning dew Rested between lips of quiver dividing horizons hue Breath of hibiscus song nestled in whispering spoon Blossoms to silken caress where fantasies are strewn Birth of silence lingers between the walls of delight Grasping at freckled constellations lost in the night Flickering aromas blaze the winds of untried time Whirlpooled in resistance to noons spiraling climb Beckonings of promise swelter in passionate musk Taunting dismissed shadows from yesterdays dusk Harmonies of midnight administer a lonliness cure Bringing us full eclipse to tomorrows Allure ... resting in the alacrity of mesmerized breeze Captured early moments in pillowed desires to please Cherished futures ride the wings of erupting dreams Clouding spheres of fortune in yawn of dawn beams Mark Christopher Recognize love for the gift it is and not a need that is out of focus. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (07-13-2002 11:21 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow. For the fluid beauty of this slipping off the tongue...incredible... and now? what's dat meter? Hmmm...I am thinking iambic pentameter but a hunch tells me I'll be corrected on that too...this is a rhythm of writing that escapes me (FOR NOW, ME HOPES) but I have to learn to do this. I love how each line slips into the next, like sleight-of-hand. Amazing, you. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Damn K, you read fast. I had to do it a couple times, ok 3. I'm a slow comprehender. Mark, would you understand if I said 'fitzgerald'?. Have I mentioned today that I love you? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, oh my gosh, this is soooooooo beautifully captivating, your gorgeous words always allure all our hearts with wonder! (big huggssssssss) This is most excellently alluring and romantic, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (07-13-2002 03:48 AM).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark, I love the smooth flow of this, and the sensual feelings it brings to the soul! There is an allure captured within it, and it pulls the eye back for another taste..  Open the door and let your adventure begin!!! [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (07-13-2002 04:38 AM).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Birth of silence lingers between the walls of delight Grasping at freckled constellations lost in the night Flickering aromas blaze the winds of untried time Whirlpooled in resistance to noons spiraling climb
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Beautiful" doesn't say it all, but it's a start....oh,  ,that's another start.... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So romantic and peaceful. You have a way of saying thngs that is just beautiful. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Romantic, peaceful, exquisite.... When all the superlatives have been used.. I shall say 'thank you for this keeper'. BTW...love the pic! Your cat? ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Allure ... resting in the alacrity of mesmerized breeze ========================= Clouding spheres of fortune in yawn of dawn beams Lyrics of innocence dance in velvet curtains of sleep Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep =============================== Yearn of learn sparkles in first kiss of morning dew Rested between lips of quiver dividing horizons hue Breath of hibiscus song nestled in whispering spoon Blossoms to silken caress where fantasies are strewn ================================ Grasping at freckled constellations lost in the night ================================ Whirlpooled in resistance to noons spiraling climb ================================ Taunting dismissed shadows from yesterdays dusk Harmonies of midnight administer a lonliness cure =============================== Again I have to say-- With every write you take your poetry to a higher level, and make it real hard for a moth in worship to single out fave lines, for as KA says ..each flows into the next like liquid rhyme. And yes, you know Im smiling at the internal rhymes. (hmmm?) could it be that someone is actually trying to make these even more impressive?  What struck me most about this one is the depth of the imagery...and the ethereal grandeur of it. Also the phrasing and vocabulary with which you create these images. Your imagery is breathtakingly powerful, romantically overwhelming...yet you paint it with tight, consise wordstrokes (and clever use of metaphor and personification)...no colors or verbiage wasted: mesmerized breeze dividing horizons hue Breath of hibiscus freckled constellations dismissed shadows yesterdays dusk midnight administer ( how cool is that) The imagery in this piece reminds me of the movie "What Dreams May Come" ... where the characters are thrust into paintings and dreamscapes of bold, vivid scenes...with vibrant colors and larger than life backgrounds. You create a collage of images for our mind's eye and dress them up with your gift of cadence and romantic intend, all captured with a mature, poetic intelligence that proves to me that you've found the secret for combining your talents as both poet and artist. May I call you MC Monet? you can call me JM--Mothinworship PS...this ones gonna be real hard to find the perfect pic for...but ya know the moth is persistant  Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much ... Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch. J.Browne [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (07-13-2002 01:37 PM).] |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
This one takes the heart on a tour of allure and boldly draws one into a pleasurable poetic read... I have admired your work for sometime...always a pleasure! aloha. Cher CSKpoet aloha... with warm regards [This message has been edited by CSKpoet (07-15-2002 04:17 PM).] |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Mark, Very descriptive, creative, and melodic verse that "allures" the imagination and senses my friend into the arms of a most divine quality of emotion. Thanks for sharing your talent and for you most kind replies. GOD bless. -Bob |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Close to perfection...James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
mark, breathtaking...your words always move your readers beyond all limits, i loved the imagery in this. words fail me to adequately describe just how beautiful this is...but know that i am as always in awe of your talent. take care. amy "you can't stop |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark Many of the words I would say have already been said...flow, sound, imagery, all so perfectly presented. This is just exquisite! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What an outstanding definition of the word! ....take your bows sir! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Clouding spheres of fortune in yawn of dawn beams  Yearn of learn sparkles in first kiss of morning dew  Rested between lips of quiver dividing horizons hue  Grasping at freckled constellations lost in the night  Harmonies of midnight administer a lonliness cure  ~~~~~~~~~ its a tough job...but some moths gotta do it. *wink* This is what I can expect to see later this summer, right? I sure hope the ocean can live up to your imagery. (wakkawakka) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
serenity-Iambic Pentameter? What kind a critter is that? Honestly, I have never studied it yet so I couldn't tell you. I doubt it highly though from what I know of it. Thank you much for the wow and incredible. Duncan-Yes I would and I thank you much for the high compliment. Noah-Thank you for your always glowing comments. Sunnyone-I am happy that you found it enjoyable and worth a second taste. Thank you dearly. Regina-"Elysian"? I hope that is a good thing especially if I am completely that. You said stanzas ... I count "one", so you owe me one. LOL Seriously, thank you for the kindness in your critique and if you could see all that in it then I am happy. Sunshine-You have to start somewhere. Thank you much. Sandra-If you found peacefulness in it then of course I am elated. Thank you dearly. Enchantress-A keeper always works for me. Thank you much. My cat? I wish!! We adopted each other on a very limited basis. JM-You know that I am always blown away at your comments and will always come back and ask for MORE don't you?? LOL Thanks sweetie for all you do to make me strive higher in my works and for keeping my feet on the ground so much. Your critiques always mention the things that allow me to know if I am growing as a poet and you know how important that is to me. Cher-Thank you so much for those wonderful words. I sincerely appreciate them. Bob-So very nice to see you in here. Thank you very much for those special words. I will see you in SJ I am sure and God bless you as well. James-I hope I never get there. Thank you much. Amy-If I left you in awe then I can't complain. Thank you very much. Martie-An exquisite from you is like getting a perfect 8 second ride on the best there is. Thank you sweet one. You are cherished in a very special place in my heart forever. BluesSerenade-Bowing gracefully and thanking you profusely. JM-You will just have to wait and see now won't you? Thanks for the lovely pics. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im back...did ya miss me? rofl... OK....last night I couldnt get in the site for the pics I REALLY wanted to use... the other pics were perfect for matching with your way cool lines of personification and imagery...but these 2 were what the poem as a whole painted in my mind, and was what I meant when I refered to that movie and dreamscapes.....and....you wont be surprised they are by one of your faves. I told you...the moth is persistant...   artwork from: www.jimwarren.com and this last one? .... Im adding it just cuz I like it and just cause I can.   hey frostybritches... that one gives whole new meaning to sand in yer shorts wakka wakka |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Lyrics of innocence dance in velvet curtains of sleep Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep Cradled embrace tossed in throes of tangled thought Stretch to the warming rise of imaginations caught If this poem were food, Mark....I would have to devour it... but instead, I devoured your words and your remarkable imagery... Its gorgeous beyond description.  ~ hugs in velvet curtainsLyra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark Once again my friend....exceptional! Metaphorically a jewell. It's such a pleasure to read your flowing words... Lyrics of innocence dance in velvet curtains of sleep Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep Cradled embrace tossed in throes of tangled thought Stretch to the warming rise of imaginations caught That's pure poetry my friend!! He he I love reading (and viewing Janet's comments too! Regards. Eric |
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mycafe Senior Member
since 2002-05-23
Posts 584 |
an alluring piece of write...you never fail to amaze mycafe Keep counting your blessings |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
soft sides of the inner edge you work some magic with no hands sir..well done |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lyrics of innocence dance in velvet curtains of sleep Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep Cradled embrace tossed in throes of tangled thought Stretch to the warming rise of imaginations caught First off to pick any one verse is about impossible, but this verse here is so eloquent in its beauty! Sheltering emerald reflections of love passages keep... That line alone is just outstanding Mark. This is a gem for the treasure box, do you mind much if I tuck it away with all the other "diamonds"? Enjoy life, this is NOT a dress rehearsal. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Yearn of learn sparkles in first kiss of morning dew Rested between lips of quiver dividing horizons hue Breath of hibiscus song nestled in whispering spoon Blossoms to silken caress where fantasies are strewn ~~~~~~~~~~~~ Completely captivating. Deb |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*sigh* Mark another breathtaking piece you present here. Beautiful penned  btw I like your pic, nice to see the man behind awesome poetry. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
JM- Thank you for the lovely pics. You know maybe you should decorate this place when you come to visit. NOW POST ONE OF YOUR OWN. Madame Chipmunk-Devour all you wish. I make my poems non-fattening and use only 100% natural ingredients. LOL Thank you for such a visibly tasteful comment. You are very much appreciated. ethome-Coming from one of your talent those are most cherished words indeed and I thank you with great acknowledgement. Oh , she is more like the light instead of the moth don't you agree? mycafe-Amazed always works and I hope I never fail you in that. Thank you dearly. Dark Stranger-And only two of my toes. Thank you so much. Gentle Spirit-If you find it worth tucking away, then by all means please do. Thank you so much for you warm responses always. BloomingRose-Yes you are!! Thank you sweet friend. You are one true angel and much admired with great respect.Charisma-Look!!!!!!!!!! It is the woman in front of the line of HUGE HEARTS. Thank you dear poetess. You always shine with "realness" and that is appreciated. |
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