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the flaw in her paw |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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My child is wiser than I guiled by fireflies she sees I'm not half the father I could be Too busy doing things I like instead of with the one I love This flaw will come back to haunt me Her life is a tragic dialogue "Daddy, come play with me. In a minute, hon." Instead of writing dead poems I should be watching a living one. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Brian, THIS is why I waited until I aged, to write...they are poems in the making, our little ones...get out there and catch the fireflies with her... |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Brian, I hear what you are saying. Please listen to what a 65 year old has to say to you...... My fondest memories from my childhood are those spent with my Father, who took me on Country walks, taught me the names of all the wildflowers, and best of all lit a fire and cooked bacon, and made tea on it. Take time now, and create memories for your child that will remain after you have left this life. Kind thoughts, John Grass won't grow under feet that don't move. [This message has been edited by Music Maker (07-12-2002 03:06 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Brian, I can feel the regrets pouring out in your words, sweet friend, I know how you feel but I also know you have a wonderful golden heart and you will always make your loved ones so very happy! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
from another older member - you will never say "I spent too much time with my children" - try ti find a way to be what your heart is calling you to in this poem - it is a great poem - Paul |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've been reading your work and enjoy it alot...I think that this is my favorite from you so far. (sorry I never replied before--sometimes I just get into "silent" mode) This is a beauty, brian, and I'll bet she is too! Enjoy her, m'friend. Time flies.  |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you all for making my first sojourn into "open" a nice experience. I'll be following advice and waiting for when she's busy with other things to do my scribbling Brian I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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