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Falling Into Day
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Falling Into Day |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Falling Into Day Falling into day my fingers hold the sand as rushing tide takes my dream awash and overturns the naked basket filled with scare as dark takes flight and drowns the memory of the night Awash in sheets of buttered light the fabric of dark curtain lifts and sound awakes like whispered nudge across the splay of pillowed hair a breath all honeydew with deep wake up wake up calls me from sleep Drink this morning sip of lush and watch it nudge the leafing trees to color coat away from dreams no longer filled with trepidation be still now night you are forsaken by strip of sun across the floor and still chill air through open door |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Once again...you leave me with no words... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I have one word ... Fantabulous! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie...I like where your mind goes very enjoyable view |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Awash in sheets of buttered light the fabric of dark curtain lifts and sound awakes like whispered nudge across the splay of pillowed hair a breath all honeydew with deep wake up wake up calls me from sleep Oh what a beautiful way to greet the day, Martie. You have such an unbelievable way with words.  ~ wake up hugsLyra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--You say alot with no words. Interloper--Now that's a word! DS--So glad you enjoyed the view! Lyra--you are wonderful! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
smile...nice and gentle...a very 'hushed poem.. I like!  K |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
speechless Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing....speechless....once again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Awash in sheets of buttered light the fabric of dark curtain lifts and sound awakes like whispered nudge across the splay of pillowed hair a breath all honeydew with deep wake up wake up calls me from sleep Drink this morning sip of lush and watch it nudge the leafing trees to color coat away from dreams no longer filled with trepidation be still now night you are forsaken by strip of sun across the floor and still chill air through open door ================================== Well Im not speechless... but I can think of a few who wish I was!!  LOLHow can I say how cool that second verse is if Im speechless??? How can I say how awesome the imagery and mood of this is...how can I say YEA -- MARTIE RHYMED!!! if I was to be speechless??? Ok..I'll hush now (maybe)  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ 'sound awakes like whispered nudge across the splay of pillowed hair a breath all honeydew with deep wake up wake up calls me from sleep' Called to me from pillowed thoughts~ Lovely~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie The way you see things is definitely precious... "Awash in sheets of buttered light the fabric of dark curtain lifts and sound awakes like whispered nudge across the splay of pillowed hair a breath all honeydew with deep wake up wake up calls me from sleep" Beautiful images flower girl...just beautiful! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
What!?? Sun speechless....Me thinks not... Martie, you take us into your world of dreams, of metaphors extraordinaire... of beautiful poetry.... I always enjoy the ride.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Martie, I just love the way you express yourself through such deep lush imagery, sweet friend, you butter the summer skies with your soft words! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- This left me breathless...absolutely gorgeous. Hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You've a wonderful vision Martie~ I especially liked the last verse and the strip of sun across the floor. So Pretty~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I read this last week, but the werk monster had my hands busy (he wanted my mind, too, but we don't always get what we want *G*) But it's rested gently in my mind... and is even more beautiful as I read it again. *S* |
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