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A Foolish Reverie
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A Foolish Reverie |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
A Foolish Reverie I said hold me just once You wrapped your arms around me as my breath flew from my heart I whispered show me this night You took my hands & layed them upon the stars I moaned take me, my love You layed me under our willow tree I confessed I know nothing of this, love You caressed my face in your tender hands, while your lips touched mine I sighed I belong to you Your eyes shown bright with admiration I cried your name You knew; my innocence was yours I uttered my love? You came for my heart knowing it was yours ______________________________________ She said where is your lover tonight You smiled greedily with your lips; you wanted what you came for She whispered give me a star, love You glimpsed into the heavens & found her that twinkle in my eye She moaned show me, love You layed her down by our Willow Tree She confessed I can show you many things You came into her with force knowing what she had to offer She sighed you belong to me Your eyes were cold with fear She cried your name You knew; she was what you cam for She uttered what is it? You could see me standing there For in much wisdom is much grief |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's quite twist between the two perspectives....very nicely done! |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
wow.... i didn't see that coming. what a frightening mirror. he shouldn't have taken her there... but i guess the mistake starts a little further back, doesn't it? a great, if hurtful, write. "The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite." |
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ambermize Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 157California |
I LOVED this....you have no idea....  It is beautiful, and relates to alot that I have been through....sometimes it is hard to express the other side becuase you dont want to feel that....but you did it for me .. BEAUTIFUL...*sigh* |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I really liked the way you showed both sides. Dawn |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
Ethome ~ TwIsT?!?! There was a twist?!?  you are too sweet!MidnightSon ~ It pleases me that you were suprised; & yes, this mistake happened a long time ago...He broke my heart with my consent, my friend Ambermize ~ Your kindness overwhelms me! Thank you! DawnG ~ Im so glad you enjoyed it! With Much Admiration ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Rayne, this is wonderful, sweet friend, it saddened me to see the otherside of the circumstance but I know with a golden heart like yours you will find true loves happiness forever as they both will! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rayne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow... I like this very much! *S* The second verse is so painful... a knife being twisted into a heart, wielded by the one who could do the most damage. Well done! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
The first verse was so sweet and filled with fulfillment and happiness. And then along comes verse number 2. The world could do without so many second verses, couldn't it? This is very well done, and it tells the tale. Nan |
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