Open Poetry #21 |
autumn breeze (repost from open 6) |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
like a tickling sneeze twitching in my nose. I saw your eyes, so much like mine... (yes, I think they were my own.) An Autumn breeze? Dusting blood-sweat from my brow? I need to build a kite to fly if I can remember how. stifling heat-- we need a blanket spread. There--a magnolia come, and I'll show you a place to rest your head. don't tease me, please... (We both know it's July.) Two pairs of feet grip hot streets as four eyes search the sky. let's make no vows while these autumn breezes blow. I'll be content with no intent of malice when you go. are instinct--not reason; let us build a kite and float. Lest winter freezes turn sweet breezes into cold familiar snow. the heat of a fire, searching for a warmer cloak. Shivering, remembering how Autumn breezes blow. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How you DO that from where you are just leaves me in a mass of ah-maze.... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
You do rhyme so well. Much enjoyed! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
summer breezes too? emjoyed it ms serene |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ty for reposting this... ooooh yes i remember new orleans in an autumn breeze...i remember all of new orleans...it calls to me of late...pulling me like a magnet...the silky arms of sultry...i must make a trip soon...or i might smother...i DO miss living there !!!!...but i KNOW where the airport is and then new orleans...is just an hour away... |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Like Sunshine I'm amazed too! This is great work Serenity! [This message has been edited by cherrypoptart (07-05-2002 06:46 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you are in great form..whether in the heat of July or a soft Autumn breeze *s M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YOU dear poetess have rendered me speechless! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey!!!!!!!!!!! I just started getting enough time to try and get my tan back and here I find the Autumn breezes being beckoned. Does this mean you are searching for Autumn weather all year long? I don't know how Autumn breezes are in New Orleans but you sure do make them sound inviting. Wonderful flow in your words and of course your line breaks are always right on. They help the reader put the right emphasis on each part. Very much enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah, I've not lost my mind...Helen's post reminded me of a steamy summer, when I met this guy that was a breath of fresh air--rare thing in N.O. in the dog days of summer... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oops...sigh...and THANK YOU---sigh it was "rush hour" here....my humble apologies and gratitude! |
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