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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
If I could truly be an example of my inner thoughts and desires, I'd share with those who horde. From a little piece of myself I'd speak thoughts to stimulate the tunneled greedy hearts, spread unmistaken kindness over lips and give an unsuspected kiss to hard nosed dollar diggers, with a gentle hug and a drink from the fountain of truth If I could truly be an example of my deepest wishes and love promises I'd find a highway under the sea collecting the four corners to me. And the sensations on the front page would be about the pleasure of living in an earthly paradise where the favorite drink wouldn't need all this ice. If I could truly be an example of my hopes for freedom and faith I'd spend my living years preaching love and grace with kindness by my side as a crutch to prop up the unfortunate and disabled ushering them through halls of personal fame, the awards, achievemnets of selfless giving. I weigh in at intentions several pounds shy of champion material, but my heart is heavy with If I could truly be an example of how I should be' maybe someone.....would let me give to them that example of me that they gave to me....... while they were seeking love and security! My father had a daughter and everyone was suprised! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"My father had a daughter and everyone was surprised..." I had to giggle when I read that! And I have to say, this is worthy of reading, and a re-read as well... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling...you melt my cynicism! Enjoyed this expression of ideals, and the vision of a soul in earnest. Beautiful. (and yep, I grin with Sunshine, on that line) nice touch, that |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Thanks Sunshine and Serenity I rally appreciate your comments! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Cherry darling girl this is wonderful writing, you never cease to amaze me, your pop raised an absolute diamond. Your writing illuminates the page with your love for life and others shines through every single word. This is utterly utterly wonderful darling heart. You know I absolutely love this don’t you. Utterly utterly perfect. How can you write so consistently well? I know you simply write and how it turns out is in the lap of fate. Excellent writing absolutely excellent    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Rebecca...this is just as good as it gets... you compacted quite a bit of you here and I enjoyed every morsel!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Is it any wonder your dad is so proud of you? To think like this is to change the world. It takes a poet! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I don't know where you come up with this stuff but I'm certainly glad you do!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice....James |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Thank you Marsha, Devina, Martie, Dad and James! I really appreciate the comments! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I agree with Martie....poets do change the world... excellent write, Cherry  ~ lots of hugsLyra |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
much enjoyed... Martin |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Rebecca, this is wonderful, sweet friend, yes, poets can change the world indeed and I know you will always be an example of what you are a slong as you believe in you! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rebecca, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This is quite the remarkable piece of poetry you have penned. It stands on it's own as poetic beauty with super line breaks and impact, then you toss in the heart and wisdom that it was written with and ... well ... we have no choice but to be IMPRESSED. Now, go teach some of these things to your DAD! LOL ( kidding ... he is a great role model from what I can tell and it is no surprise that his daughter has the wisdom to match. Wonderful work you have delievered here. I very much enjoyed. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Now this was simply perfection! ~Tier "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
Thank you Madame Chipmunk, Ecrivan, Noah, Mark and Tiersdin I appreciate the kind words. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
If there were more people with these thoughts, the world would be a better place. Hugs Sandra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good one, I liked it! |
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