I Sit Here Kinda Dazed I Guess.............

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Jon Mewett
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since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

0 posted 2002-07-02 11:46 AM

I sit here kinda dazed I guess
A bottle in my hand
The foaming sea has washed away
Our footprints in the sand
The burning sun has left its mark
The truth it burns inside
I walk along and kick the stones
Into the rushing tide

It started out like glories flame
A beacon on my heart
Calling out to all who saw
The gates of heaven were apart
It was as though we’d fallen
Into fields of swaying corn
But I shoulda known the gentle breeze
Was a warning before the storm

If I could take this fateful day
And hang it on a hook
If I could remember all I’ve learned
And write it in a book
If I could only take it back
And live my time again
I’d bend just like a willow tree
And wouldn’t mind the rain

Refrain

You see true love
Only comes but once a while
And you gotta know that when it does
You gotta laugh before you smile

Jon Mewett

Just wondered what you guys think of this lyric for a new song.........stay warm

Jon

All these moments
In time
Will be Lost
Like Tears in the rain

[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (07-03-2002 05:54 AM).]

Krishankins

Senior Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

1 posted 2002-07-02 11:51 AM

"I'd bend just like a Willow tree
And wouldn't mind the rain"

Nice visual. I like the words. For a love song, of course.
Nice write!

Krishankins

A bird never flies so high that it can't hit the ground

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2002-07-02 02:01 PM

very nice for a song...and a poem too

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

3 posted 2002-07-02 02:16 PM

Jon! It has been a long time since last we saw a refrain from you...welcome home...Enjoyed the write...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-07-02 02:26 PM

Jon, so nice to read you again!!
This would make a wonderful love song..Enjoyed!
Hope you can stay awhile...
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2002-07-02 02:28 PM

Jon, I agree, this is a great song.
Sandra

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2002-07-02 04:15 PM

Very nice...James

mable_sue
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 25
Iowa

7 posted 2002-07-02 05:42 PM

I'd be rocking to this. I have a hard time with lyrics. My only criticism would have to lie in your title....make it mysterious so I am suprised by what follows.

Wish I could hear it to the music in your head.

Thanks,
Liz

Jon Mewett
Senior Member

since 2000-03-04

Posts 1304

8 posted 2002-07-03 05:53 AM

Thanx everybody.........your input is much appreciated.........point taken on the title...the actual song will be titled.......'Laugh Before You Smile'which is a little more interesting don't you think?

I have also slightly rewritten the above!!

I will let you know when it's recorded.....until then........Stay Warm!!

Jon

All these moments
In time
Will be Lost
Like Tears in the rain

[This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (07-03-2002 05:56 AM).]

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