Open Poetry #21 |
Decisions in the Dark |
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
There are times within your life you know you can't go on You struggle through, soul bruised and blue With no redeeming song No stars within the darkness shines no light to see you through you battle on but hope is gone you know not what to do You seal your heart against the gloom and make a pact to stay yet still the dark in sear and stark Decides there is no way And so you plot, with bitter plans A way to make it end You make a brew To see you through And try to make amends As tears fall down to hit the floor You think it should end thus In foulest bile And self revile With no fight left to cuss Your plan is done and mind made up You live and die in gloom The time is set You've sealed the net And glance around your room There before your eyes you spy A gleam of radiant light Never before In days of yore Have you seen such a sight The ray it gleams in memory Of what was once a day Entranced you kneel Begin to feel And know that you must pray In prayers release of all you need And all you've been denied You seal the pact And do not act As healing starts inside The journey goes each day you fight And wrestle with the need But what you sow Begins to grow And smothers satan's seed Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I feel a lot of emotion going on here. I like this poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Absolutely beautiful writing, Keth... I hope you are okay... ~ healing hugs to a wonderful poet friend Lyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Keth, good to see you again...Seems you have had a few tough days and through faith and strength....you shall overcome... Your poetry grows each time you write. A very well crafted piece of yourself... Shared with US....Thank You.. |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I really enjoyed reading this....I recently made a big decision during a rough time and I know it was the right thing to do. This poem is quietly encouraging and definitely a keeper! Well done! ~sky You look inside my wild mind |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lynne All I can say is Wow! So very powerful and moving were your words and so very much enjoyed as always. I hope you are well. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sister of my heart, and my soul’s voice, you even manage to convey the feelings of frustration and despair of life’s pain and do so in a way that showcases your amazing talent. You literally light up the whole forum. For anyone who has felt they had run out of options and hope, they will find within this powerful and utterly beautiful peace some soul’s release. You know I adore your writing, and no matter how busy I am I simply have to find time for you. But then you know that, don’t you? I have to have my soul touched by your pesence, or else the day lacks a vital ingredient. A bit like a song, the words are beautiful and can stand alone, but add the melody and the words are transformed, so is a day with my daily does of Keth. When you are added to the mix of sunlight and shadow then my soul is lifted higher, and my day is blessed with wonder. Anyway this is another utterly utterly perfectly penned poem from you and I absolutely love it. Thank you for my making my day, truly exceptional. And adding life to my life As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
What an Incredible piece!!!! there are so many that sit in the dark with no visible means of escape. There IS ALWAYS a LIGHT. even when the hubble space telescope trained its sights on a very starless portion of sky, as it focused, and held its sights there for a longer length of time, there appeared a myriad of galaxies to dazzle the eye.... never seen before. We are never alone and the light we seek may be just to faint to see... it takes faith and focus to adjust our sight to finally see it before us. NEVER GIVE UP!!!! Love LIGHT and Peace, Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Amen Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Auntie Kethp I rarely get a chance to tell you how good your writing is, mum hogs her computer so. However today I get the opportunity and so am taking full advantage of it. You do realise that your writing really is excellent, you manage to combine hope light and love and then wrap it neatly together so it flows as one. There are many writers here, the majority of them are good writers, some aren’t so good, and some are simply outstanding. You are in the top two percent of them, and yes I am a bit biased but then it is hard not to be biased when you are such a good writer. Mum may have steered me to Passion’s she may have predisposed me to know quality when I read it, but she never forced her opinions on to either Emma or me. This poem is wonderful as mum so rightly points out it flows from one point to another and it’s excellently done. I really do love it. And that is my honest and unbiased opinion Very very well written Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhKethry~ You've written a beautifully moving piece here~ I've got a heart full of WOW's~ Poignant poetry ...~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent Keth. . . the right decision made. . . always good to see your work my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I believe sometimes we find ourselves on the wrong path and through inner reflection we can find our way back...step by step...James |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Kethry, A very powerful message you have here...aside from the perfect rythmn! I love it! Cindi |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
some amazing eyes you have Kethry, and the words too..smooooth |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Long before I finished reading, I knew that I would be saving this one to read again and again... I already have the add to library box checked. *S* This isn't just powerful writing, Kethry... and it isn't just rhymes that fall easy on the ear or a cadence that never falters... it's a candle lit from the fires of experience... and lady, it glows. *S* Superb writing!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You hang in there Keth! You're worth more than 100 million picnic kisses! There's a light shining through the darkness in this write and it's your light ...beautiful and poetic!! I'm with you all the way! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I was getting really depressed, and then you perked it right up just for me. Thanks, I'd hate to go through the weekend with the blues. Nan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ohhhhh Kethry, this moved me beyond words... Muaah on cheekz dearPoetFriend and I thank you4this exquisite read... *~coco~* |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
Great Write !! Kitty If you can't make it so, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...In prayers release of all you need And all you've been denied You seal the pact And do not act As healing starts inside The journey goes each day you fight And wrestle with the need But what you sow Begins to grow And smothers satan's seed... I like the way you found the answer.... well done, m'dear.... |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
Auntie Keth this is your writing at it’s best, the flow construction and the concept are all excellent. You know I admire your writing enormously. Not only do you have the ability to write like a dream you also have enough command of the English language to use it stunningly. This it absolutely excellent. Emma Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, This is an excellent write, your talent is showing on this one. |
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