My shot at Guide Me To An Ocean (challenge by midsummer rain)

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Open Poetry #21

My shot at Guide Me To An Ocean (challenge by midsummer rain)

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2002-06-11 08:46 PM

Guide me to an ocean,
cleanse my feet with salty spray,
hold me back from the sirens call,
calling me to the briny deep.

Guide me to an ocean
with waters of deepest blue,
on dolphin backs I'll skim the waves,
till the sunlit sky turns its darkest hue.

Guide me to an ocean
lay my bones at the bottom of the sea,
sail with me on a ship of souls,
skimming the bottom restlessly.

jwesley

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-06-11 09:01 PM

Speaking my mind truthfully (as you desire)

Done well. very well. Let me get the salt
off my shoes.... Excellent write, Jimmy...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-06-11 09:56 PM

More sea foam to get lost in...
thank you, James...

MIdsummerRain
Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 175
St. Louis, Missouri

3 posted 2002-06-12 12:59 PM

You guided me to an ocean tonight, my friend...I thank you; what a splended write! ~Rayne

For in much wisdom is much grief
& he who increases knowledge
increases sorrow...
Eccl. 1:18

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2002-06-12 03:26 AM

I would say challenge well answered.....nice work all the way around!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-06-12 04:38 PM

ah yes. . . breathe deep the ocean air. . .

great work my friend. . .

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