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Refusal of a High Gloss--Dying, in the gilded cage
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Refusal of a High Gloss--Dying, in the gilded cage |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Bottom is a sheet of glass broken like pieces of us Bottom is retreat of past returning as a succubus... The end? is just the pendulum... it swings to its own length... however high it made you feel? That is how far that you will sink. I sweep glass of my own break-- creating diamonds on the floor. Somehow wax is not enough-- I wanted life to offer more. [This message has been edited by serenity (06-29-2002 06:13 AM).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The end? is just the pendulum... it swings to its own length... however high it made you feel? That is how far that you will sink. =================================== Oh yes, those words are so very very true. Excellent writing as usual. Full of thoughts that initiate a higher understanding of the risk in all that we choose to delve into. I do like the way your mind works even when I feel as though mine isn't. |
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Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
quite though-provoking, yes, indeed and love the formatting, perfect, mhmm oh, and, your constructive critique encouragement quote...i'm just laughing 's all. hehe |
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BrandeeM Junior Member
since 2002-05-01
Posts 45 |
Quite some thoughts here!!! enjoyed this!!! [This message has been edited by BrandeeM (06-29-2002 02:27 AM).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
The last stanza just rocked my screen sis... oh you know... Drop me a line??? *anxious* you take care lil miss surprise!!! Love ya! ~me Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ouch. Smile. Think I cut myself.... sighs and tsk-to-me... thanks guys.  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Does life offer us something or do we have to MAKE something out of life? I enjoyed this missy.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The end? is just the pendulum... it swings to its own length... however high it made you feel? That is how far that you will sink. I sweep glass of my own break-- creating diamonds on the floor. Somehow wax is not enough-- I wanted life to offer more. ================================= some get diamonds ... some get coal... sometimes we can turn coal into diamonds... but we have to have a really tight place to shove them!!  I mean....Oh..you know what I mean rofl love the metaphor and imagery in this me twin...most of all the way you wrap me in rhyme  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
two of my favorite ladies---thank you both, just for BEING--Sharon and Jan? I consider myself fortunate to know you both...y'all have a way of making me think without feeling "judged." Muchos Gracias. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
building on deVine's thought. . . I would say that life offers. . . and that we have to make it. . . great work you. . . always teaches me something I didn't know that I needed to learn. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
"I sweep glass of my own break-- creating diamonds on the floor. Somehow wax is not enough-- I wanted life to offer more." broken glass to diamonds? gorgeous. oh, the pendulum... ~smile~ friend of mine was telling me the other day that people travel in wavelengths... highs and lows working at near equal ratios... same theory... and from what i've seen, well, at least the extremes can create some frickin' cool poetry... in the write hands of course. (& I think someone else mentioned that once to me before... now, who was that?...) |
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