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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Okay the challenges here are becoming a little unwieldy for me far to much introspection. Heres something a little plainer. Write a poem 20 lines long. 5 words exactly per line. every word must be used at least twice. and the title must include a body part. SO what are you waiting for? get to it people. So won't you sing me a rainbow Josie roll me a song |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
foot to you hunnie so you hate my poems, I don't give a lick, here is my big foot, give me one more reason, I'll prove that it sticks, so I hate you too, there's nothing you can do, don't even try any more, to answer in that tone, I'll give you one reason, I don't answer to you, you think I need approval, that's all you can do? you think it hurts me, a tone in your poems there's nothing I hate more, I'll even give my approval, that's all i need to, A lick proves to try, sticks don't hurt you anymore? haha this was amazingly hard to write hmmmmm I could have done it better if I didn't have to use the words at least twice ahhh hard work... okaie so the last stanza doesn't make sense 'cos I had to use the left over words haha...:P I didn't post this anywhere but here 'cos if I did I wouldn't have very many friends huh? hehe hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
It is fun though isn't it i used to string 2 challenges together to come up with really hard poem to write. Anyway considering all the rules good write. To take a lot of pain, |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Walter you describe a Malaysian poetic style known as a Pantoum. I will gladly, and with tongue in cheek, answer your challenge, Sir. MoonShadow “Walking a Breast” Tell me have you seen such a lovely sight two with one between walking in moonlight? Such a lovely sight, sweet and white as milk, walking in moonlight smooth and soft as silk. Sweet and white as milk porcelain surprise smooth and soft as silk pleasing to the eyes Porcelain surprise proud above the rest pleasing to the eyes two walking a breast. Proud above the rest two with one between two walking a breast tell me have you seen? . |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
5 words per line you cheater Good poem though but we must be strict musn't we If we aren't everyone will be doing it tut tut. To take a lot of pain, |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
20 lines long. 5 words exactly per line. every word must be used at least twice. and the title must include a body part. just to prove eye can do it to. You walked in on me I felt your eyes grip loving tender kisses you slip My hearts beat skip skip loving walked in tender hearts tender pieces of me ripped loving fingers tip to tip kisses passed lip to lip Maybe pieces of our souls Maybe ripped lost, made whole Passed between what had been And what i felt before Your heart slip had been Our souls in between us My beat thud thud bust bust before me, lost me. To take a lot of pain, |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Sorry I misread and assumed five sylables. My mistake. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am working on the challenge..but have a few loose ends to tie up..the last verse is hard not to put anything extra into.  ...how's this:Face to Face Upon your entrance, face to face reaching for that special place. Eyes to eyes that can read within hearts of feelings' need. Need not place hand in hand To ever-feelings upon your stand. Special is that entrance of reaching for words in love. Love is just words away Cannot hold what cannot stay Read between these lines of Within here, lies my love. Hold onto what lies within Hearts just stay between again Again trace my lines above Lips to lips feelings of Trace here, stand the now. These above, share I vow. Now here to ever more Vow I to ...adore,adore! M ..made the changes... [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-16-2007 06:35 PM).] |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
I just realised i did it wrong myself, Oh the shame i missed a whole verse. that will teach me to rush my poems. For shame Walter for shame. To take a lot of pain, |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
You walked in on me I felt your eyes grip loving tender kisses you slip My hearts beat skip skip loving walked in tender hearts tender pieces of me ripped loving fingers tip to tip kisses passed lip to lip Maybe pieces of our souls Maybe ripped loose, made whole Passed between what had been And what i felt before Your heart slip had been Our souls in between us My beat repeats thud thud Worlds pass is always thus Lost worlds before me pass Thus repeats deep boom boom Bust loose before me eternally Eternally free is always free. To take a lot of pain, |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Nakd thoughts been thinking maybe swap 'word' for 'words' and 'to' for 'just'. It still needs a little every word needs to be repeated work too but good start To take a lot of pain, |
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