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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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How about a poem about being Vulnerable with out using- the word Vulnerable, weak, pathetic,need, dependent. others will be fine. Using-free style (the shorter the better) Have fun... -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
/pip/Forum92/HTML/003408.html I forgot.... heh..... -JUju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lying, apathetic the cool breath of 'morn awakens my spirit to go traveling, traversing along city streets, tramping over people and life itself - I think that I should retire to sleep again because the daylight crowds my brain while the night embraces me with soft kisses. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
That is a good poem I liked it alot. You used the show don't tell technique, which is great for setting an mood or atmosphere. I liked the clear symbols too. well done. -Juju |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Walking this way i met myself i looked into my eyes i looked deep into my own soul at what lay beneath the skin this skin i saw my weakness that eats away at me i saw the wolf at my door I saw the darkness deep within me and how on my life it did draw i saw a future devoid of hope i saw a past of wasted dreams that my friend that was the day that i reached my end Take a good look at my face |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Very nice poem I liked the end. Kinda dark, but oh well. I would change the word weakness. The reason I listed those words is that those words are over used. I garentee if you change that word it will make youre poem even better(: good job, -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
Wandering aimlessly through a field of black hovering on what appears to be soil a crimson tear of terror streaks throughout the sky falling to shards among nothingness It was the day of my birth I have deteriorated more this year than most as weights of responsibility have been tied to my throat It was my birthday today and never have I been more lost. (an attempt playing off of my recent birthday on the June 17th. I hope this fills the criteria) nice use of muffin |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
THat was really good. I like the way you phased each stanza. I like poems that are like this. well done. (: -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Juju! Your challenge inspired me to write "Scorched". /pip/Forum93/HTML/000941.html Thank you!  EA |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Here's mine Juju - short and maybe not so sweet  /pip/Forum93/HTML/000944.html |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
/pip/Forum93/HTML/000957.html Excellent challenge, Juju. Thank you! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
No light pours in through tainted glass This love of woe has come to pass Though darkness grows with every hour My heart does seek the one with power To shine through darkness baring light Who fights for me with all their might Who's love is true and stong and sure Who loving look is all the cure and though I wait and though I look What sun does shine upon this book? It pages old and worn and sad But inside all will make you glad Just take a chance to look inside For all the wonder it can provide But many looked for just one page Some saw two but didn't gage The life there hidden in the words The life they sought amoungst the birds Where song is sung and joy is near But they just couldn't fight the fear And so the book with aged face Forever waits there in it's place. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
took a journey my soul and i above it all~ as spirits wings kept sights afar~ when near to heart the lights grew dim~ as life and love and truths never given all came tumbling in~  My spirit will rise |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Wow it was really alot of fun seeing you all taking apart in this chalange. Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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