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Paula Finn
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0 posted 2001-06-12 02:07 AM


Fly Fly...on wings forged in winter ice

Riding that memory train to nowhere

Convince me...that pleasure lies on your lips


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PoemCrazy
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1 posted 2001-06-13 03:07 AM


neat challenge, but nigh impossible to do in this venue.  you can't see lips here...tom
PoemCrazy
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2 posted 2001-06-13 03:07 AM


he he!
damned doubleclicks!

[This message has been edited by PoemCrazy (edited 06-13-2001).]

Angel
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
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3 posted 2001-07-12 09:27 PM


Two out of three isn't too bad  .

"Fly Away"

Little One taken too soon
I stand over you on this,
Your cold winter's morn
You've left me now
Although I want you back
You are one of his
And you're time has come
You touched my hand
So softly
Just before you slipped
Away.
And I pray to God as I
Stand here with tears
Streaming down my cheeks
That he will love you and
Hold you, my child, just
As he did once before.
Fly away to him dear one
Fly Fly on wings forged
In winter's ice,
Fly away to him and
Find solace within his
Arms.

"Remember"

I remember you...
So well.
The taste of your skin
The way a single piece
Of hair fell to your nose.
The way you smiled
At how goofy I acted.
The way the summer sun
Glittered off your eyes
That day.
When we ran along the beach
Why did it ever have to end?
And now you visit me so often
Yet it never feels like enough
You always end up leaving me
Behind.
Now I sit in your rocking chair
Following the rhythm of your
Heart
Back and forth to the engine's
Persistent chuggings
I can almost see you
Sitting across from me
Riding the memory train to
Nowhere.

Thanks for the great inspiration. I'll be working on the last one.

~Susie

~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~

Paula Finn
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4 posted 2001-07-14 03:53 AM


These are fabulous
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5 posted 2001-07-17 11:16 PM


I'm really enjoying these!  These poems are beautiful... inspiring.  Nicely done, you guys!

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

Angel
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
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6 posted 2001-07-22 10:44 PM


Last one is done  .

You say your great
Just one of a kind
Brought here by fate
Best thing I'd find

You say you'll care
Always think of me
Leave, you won't dare
Love was your decree

You knew I was hurt
Over and over again
Treated as if I were dirt
By so very many men

I had enough of chat
Your lovey-dovey trips
Convince me that
Pleasure lies on your lips

I definetly don't like this one as much as the other two, just wanted to prove to myself I could do it  . Thanks again for the great inspiration.

~Susie

~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~

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