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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
What to do when you've got a few lines here and there for a poem you want to write, but can't think of any others? I have a couplet written to start a poem about separation, but can't seem to get any further. It has been so many days since I saw you last I used to see you often, but that was in the past and here is one more line I wish that you could be with me, if only for a while AAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
hmmmmmmmm...how about this..... It has been many days since I saw you last. I'd see you often but that is the past. I can not erase that beautiful smile. I wish you were with me...if only for a while. Now..that could be a beginning......??? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
How about this: It's been so many days since I saw you last It was back then, in our once happy past I miss your touch, your voice, your smile I wish you could be with me, if only for a while Keep at it! Sometimes we try to force words out...get up, walk around...recite it out loud.....good luck!  |
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Nimrod the Hunter Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 60 |
No need to scream, Elizabeth, I'll help you. At least I can put enough effort to try to help you.The last time I saw you wasn't the last For of remembrance did you shine in my past; Walk with me and let us laugh again Before the day fades and is soon forgotten. In this world we are but children that smile And cry, but a friend is all the while, etc..... Keep up the effort. [This message has been edited by Nimrod the Hunter (edited 06-14-99).] |
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Marie New Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 6Stafford,TX,United States |
How about....... my mind is numb with passion as I search for your love once more. my body is crumbling, my world torn apart my heart just a memory of happiness now lost. can't think of anything else.....seems I'm starting to get writer's cramp!! |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
I might say.... It has been many days since I saw you last I'd see you often but that is the past I wish you were with me if only for a while To tell me of your favorite things and what might make you smile |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Send them snippets to me Elizabeth. I am always looking for a starting point for a poem. I seem to suffer from the exact opposite problem as you... I have a heck of a time coming up with the first few lines then it gets easier as I fill around them. See "Regretting my Silence" in the open forum to see what I did with these lines. |
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DoeEyes Junior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 15Florida |
I'm not very good at this, but I'm bored, so here's an idea... It has been so many days since I saw you last. I used to see you often, But that was in the past. You are the one That my eyes always see. I love you, I miss you, So very deeply. I wish that you could be with me, If only for a while... (then use their ideas about a smile) |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Ok, heres my version Countless days, Merging into one, And months turning into years, Memories of never being without you, But that was so long ago, And now I sit here, Trying to find the words, To say how much I miss you. |
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pookie New Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 6Arnold MO USA |
Elizabeth, It's ok girl! We all experience writers block. I won't suggest another line because that never really helps me and look at all your other help!  Just think about how you felt when this special person left, lean back, close those eyes and sink into the past. Refeel, rethink, relive. AND BE. What can I say? I'm cryptic. ------------------ That which does not kill us..makes us stronger. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you all for your words and suggestions-I'm trying to use at least one of each one of yours. Thank you guys so much!!!!! |
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