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Raven. begging for ideas
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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Yes my muse or the forces that motivate me to write poetry are not talking to me and my inspiration is dry so I am begging, requesting for spare words, phrases, ideas anything that I can use to turn into a poem. I will attempt to do every sugegstion. Credit will be given to the individual donors. So here is your chance to put words in my mouth. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 08-26-2000).] |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
How about a line or two??  When the moon, Meets the stars, "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Thanks for the challenge Maria, it was great fun doing the challenge. here is a poem that sort of flowed out, light and cheerful. This is the first draft. ========================================= When the moon, Meets the stars, In the winter noon From travelling from a far They play their games of light as white bright children of the night. When the moon Dances at the edge of dawn Where all hope and dreams are first born, softly sailing in celestial seas of splendour, Our dreams are ships of their surface, the glitter on the waves are the stars upon the calmest ocean. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 08-27-2000).] |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Glad I could help, great poem btw, like what you've done "Those who will not learn to use this instrument well cannot be saved by an expanded alphabet; they will only afflict us with expanded gibberish" ~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Brian, how about "Darkness surrounds me, all is lost up to this fragile sky I'm tossed." I haven't been able to do anything with these words so you're welcome to try and If my muse flows I'll also try. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Brian I gave you the scraps, where's my winged poem. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Kethry, sorry I have not had time nor inspiration to tackle the challenge but rest assured I will as soon as I can. Sorry this is mainly due to my long work hours, but as of friday I am on hoildays. Thanks for the line, loved the image. I will use it========================================== back again ok this poem sort of came together in 2 mins. I don't know what you will think, I was just in the mood for experimenting. ------ insert title here: __________________ Darkness surrounds me, all is lost up to this fragile sky I'm tossed, to and fro and over in violence current, emotions challenge high in winter torrent. My arms are stretched towards the skies Does the God not hear my cries? "Peace at least," I scream I plead I have been the victim, oh how I bleed beneath the waters of my bathtub, phantom infant kicks inside, little unplanted baby sharpens his knife wars are waged upon me, by the men always with authority again and again soldiers march on me, I am the rape victim of the rubble, the nun chained to the missile, the mother who birthed a thousand killers, and fertilised the flowers bound as the wreaths of Hiroshima. First world power supremacy, I am democracy the beggar with child dead eyed heroin junkie. This is a confession of nothing of importance. I am million loose ends on the hanging noose, the kick that throws the chair and forces life to black. In this dead time I am that single glimmer of hope…that tiny voice that says no. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
OK if your muse has left I'm a dead eyed heroin junkie.  Well worth the wait. Now post it somewhere else Dopey.  Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
challenge from kaile:to write about the thing you wish for the most in life in a short poem of about 6-10 sentences never read a short poem from you before...looking forward to your attempt |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
The thing I wish for most in life is love, to hold some one close And to know that I am lost in Their embrace, they hold me fragile and light, caress and kiss me throughout the night, to look into my eyes and truly share my world. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
seriously though,I loved this one,Brian...short,sweet and succinct....i will try to attempt my challenge in the next few days to offer you another perspective another challenge from me: write your first haiku and post it in Open#9...come on Brian..i know you can do it |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Here you go Brian If I had to say goodbye today |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
kaile, I have a shameful secret, I can't hakiu, I now it is 5-7-5 (or something like that but I just can't break the words up right) oh the shame but if I do have time I will try. Paula, ok making holiday plans at the moment, maybe a while before I can post the results, a week maybe. Sit down and bargain "Until your tongues are dry If the havoc and the shame continue We'll drown you in our putrefaction" Primo Levi |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Brian,i absolutely forbid you to say such things....you are a tremendous gifted poet(and at such a tender age too)....in fact,i hope someday to be as proficient as you in this form of art though i guess thats deemed mission impossible...LOL no shame, Brian, just remember that heres a friend who will spur you on when you feel ready to write your haiku on your own terms and also, i have found time to attempt my on challenge...i posted it as "My Fervent Desire" in the corner pub...you may like to read when you are not too deeply engrossed in your holidays |
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