Open Poetry #20 |
weave of dreams |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
you are shadow woman shapes there on the pale sand of our cove place horizon is purple lace and lavender with sun fingers touching sea oat colors you wear my eyes on the ends of your hair my wind combs it to the side I know your neck scent and the shiver of make woman sigh skin when I touch you left your bag and wrap on the bench said you didn't need it with me only my hands and my dreams would keep you covered and warm we dance to the wave music songs they strum tide frets in samba we make deep footprint steps together the sway of entwine mining the soft dreams maybe we will sink to heaven in time through the sand well to under eden place where we would rise from desire and be alone with our arms and hearts woven into an endless braid of dreams... ©Dark |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
horizon is purple lace and lavender with sun fingers touching sea oat colors you wear my eyes on the ends of your hair my wind combs it to the side I know your neck scent and the shiver of make woman sigh skin when I touch ================================ ya know....I dont doubt that for one minute....you cause quite a few eye sighs in here with your poetry. and this....this one is a major *sigh* enchanting writing poet sir. Now for me some words come easy |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"maybe we will sink to heaven in time through the sand well to under eden place where we would rise from desire and be alone with our arms and hearts woven into an endless braid of dreams..." (big huggggssssss) This is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always sigh with such love from your heart that she will always be so blessed to share! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When poets dance, they seem to invite the whole world to join in their privacy... well done Sir...a visual delight, and we expect nothing less... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Janet Marie; your sighs are such a damp sip of morning ..thank you lady friend Noah, thank you so much amigo...that is my favorite image in the poem too..like a secret place that ends up in heaven Sunshine, good morning ms coffee to wake by..thank you for your ladyness and your soft touch. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS A sand and ocean dream...my favorite kind! The way you use words, is heaven! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
martie..my favorite place I think.. with some sun to just make you want to wear the sky as your nightshirt thanks babe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
DS darling boy this is Utterly perfect writing, flows across the senses like a breath from a lover on a warm day. Just a whisper of touch and so beautiful in it’s entirety. You write wonderfully. Excellent writing absolutely excellent Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
DS~ Big sigh over here! I rarely get to see the ocean where I am, it's only when I go travelling and seek it out that I do, so thank you for bringing me there with your words. The whole thing pours out romance, I love it! *hugs* ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Marsha, thank you ms, a pleasure to have your review. SmittyKitty, it is just across the road from me..the ocean...and in my mind when the tides rise...thank you for enjoying this |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'maybe we will sink to heaven in time through the sand well to under eden place where we would rise from desire and be alone with our arms and hearts woven into an endless braid of dreams...' Yet another amazing write, DS...I'm loving these lines and ideas... sp I've been down this road forever, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger You have woven a carpet of symbols that could take you anywhere, enjoyed. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
D~ you are a woven tapestry in dreams Good one dear sir…..lovely images as always LC~ ~Sinking fast into |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkStranger~ 'we dance to the wave music songs they strum tide frets in samba we make deep footprint steps together the sway of entwine mining the soft dreams' So inviting~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
snowpants, bless your eyes and your sweet word touches, thank you sy, you are too kind my friend, and I admire your words as well lauren, can almost see you there, like that grinning saying damn, thank you marge, thank you lady m....you bless me and I appreciate you so much |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
we dance to the wave music songs they strum tide frets in samba we make deep footprint steps together the sway of entwine mining the soft dreams I love this part..makes me think of graceful foreplay in the surf. Then winding up all wadded up on the shore. You are a samba sigh maker~wink* Sincerely, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
James, thank you sir for your reads Regina..can make some great kuminjya music too...visit my mind sometime will recite for you...thanks lady |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
you wear my eyes on the ends of your hair my wind combs it to the side I know your neck scent and the shiver of make woman sigh skin when I touch ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ check out these lines.... I mean they are ALL great ... gotts love these ~~ Connie ~~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, this is all so seductive and intriguing. I hav to say this stanza did it for me, though. "maybe we will sink to heaven in time through the sand well to under eden place where we would rise from desire and be alone with our arms and hearts woven into an endless braid of dreams" Write on, your words are always so stunning. Sandra |
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