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There is nothing left between us
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There is nothing left between us |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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There is nothing left between us but song deep shadows. There is nothing left between us but basement heat. There is nothing left between us but summer's running glass. There is nothing left between us but the street. There is nothing left between us but the book opened, marked -- a white face searching in a golden room. There is nothing left between us but the small, sad death of this day. Celebration's bloom. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There is nothing left between us but song deep shadows. There is nothing left between us but basement heat. There is nothing left between us but summer's running glass. There is nothing left between us but the street. ================================= *smiling at how cool you write* and how unique and clever your images and analogies are. waaay cool BSQ  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
At first? I was scratching my head over the final line, and then, I smiled and thought, "of course!" Methinks I DO understand! In fact, it makes the poem. Wry look at things, and I love it. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Actually inspired by an erotic story I read on salon.com. Well, the last line, anyway. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is a mood poem...I can't even explain why I like it, just put me into a mood...I like those...kind of sad... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, passing shadows. I've been on a Cure binge recently, so that might explain it. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yes, yes, oh, I just love the wonderful analogies you put into your words, this is indeed an interesyting poem and almost couldn't believe it came inspired from an erotic story! (big huggssssss) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Find myself smiling at your last line Mike... purging is good...and you do this sooo well!! Take care!! ~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...song deep shadows... Wow.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes Michael, that explains it |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you all enjoyed. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
bsquirrel - very clever write, liked it much... BC |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you. |
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