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Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

0 posted 2002-04-22 06:00 PM

I never knew that sadness
could keep a peaceful form
while thoughts with fingers through my dreams
another wing is worn.

To dream I never went to sleep
no softness near to scorn
means no more nightmares trip my screams
when love is too forlorn.

I never knew that sadness
could disguise in peaceful form
although tears my betrayal, seems
to show every place I'm torn.

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

[This message has been edited by Siofra (04-22-2002 06:01 PM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-04-22 06:58 PM

I really enjoyed this. It reminds me of Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art".

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-04-22 07:56 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Siofra, I know this feeling all too well and I have realized it only hurts if we hide our sorrows in our hearts longer and it is important to share! (sigh) This is sad but powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Siofra, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Jeffrey E. Osborne
Member

since 2001-11-01

Posts 160
out there

3 posted 2002-04-22 08:51 PM

This poem speaks volumes to me, especially the lines:

I never knew that sadness
could disguise in peaceful form
although tears my betrayal, seems
to show every place I'm torn.

Very well done!
- Jeff

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

4 posted 2002-04-23 01:48 AM

Dear One, weep not, for there a relief to your sadness, and for these words, which are from your heart.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

5 posted 2002-04-23 01:53 AM

To dream I never went to sleep
no softness near to scorn
means no more nightmares trip my screams
when love is too forlorn.

I know these words...excellant write.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-04-23 04:57 PM

the form of this is unique. . .the rhyme scheme lends to the feeling of it. . .

sometimes. . . sadness is best shown. . . well done. . .

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