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Bending Earth
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Bending Earth |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I stand the sound of waves breaking inside me-- I went to the shore, to blend, to form with life, the still life the wetness of water drinking slowly it draws you in becomes a sin of nature an everlasting reminder of how far the shore can be --slowly I become baffled by the bending of earth and how the horizon turns upside down, spilling all thoughts of sanity forming a river of darkness-- I stood untouched, untold from gathering moments of reality, from where I use to be, raking leaves in colorful emotion watching the dance consume closer to a breeze of any last idea I might own but am I aware, how I dared my mouth to speak to allow words, spilling in a fumble from my lips I did, it made its echo, a presentation to fertile flowers waiting for April rain to soak the green and live in unity brush me with your lips --in tender movements-- as I gather myself a rendition of excitement in allowing my breath to bend earth for my tears Step through the |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I stood untouched, untold from gathering moments of reality, from where I use to be, raking leaves in colorful emotion watching the dance consume closer to a breeze of any last idea I might own ============================ brush me with your lips --in tender movements-- as I gather myself a rendition of excitement in allowing my breath to bend earth for my tears ============================ your poetry has been taking new roads of late...your heart holding on to the love...while letting go of the loss...opening up a door to healing...and the touch of another.... tis a beautiful thing to witness...watching you fly.   |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
waiting for April rain to soak the green and live in unity brush me with your lips --in tender movements-- as I gather myself a rendition of excitement in allowing my breath to bend earth for my tears ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh Lauren! This is SO beautiful... Love the style and thoughts here... Great imagery and feeling. ~Hugs~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautiful imagery of a soft and sensual poem... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"I did, it made its echo, a presentation to fertile flowers waiting for April rain to soak the green and live in unity brush me with your lips --in tender movements-- as I gather myself a rendition of excitement in allowing my breath to bend earth for my tears"   (smiles) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooo gorgeous, you always write such beautifully heartfelt words that reflect with the emerald glow of spring! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey...it's been awhile. This had a soft, slow meditative quality...like writing Tai Chi. Graceful and full of peace. I enjoyed the read, thank you. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lauren - Lovely and flowing. Enjoyed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I do like your writings, as always. This is exceptional, such depth from the inside of you, just excellent... BC |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Lauren, *sighs* You write SO beautiful. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
from where I use to be, raking leaves in colorful emotion So very very lovely, Lauren ~colorful hugsLyra |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, I'm afraid JM has you pegged. And as usual she is right about everything. Nice job indeed. It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
--slowly I become baffled by the bending of earth and how the horizon turns Loved this Lauren, could feel the movements going against the grain of your tender heart. Your poetry graces these pages in a way that's all your own. |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
it is, as always, an honor to have been allowed to share, for a moment, your eyes. you write beautifully, and that requires that you see clearly - and evidently you do. (bows deeply) you compliment us to no end by sharing this with us. -Dave |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ You have sipped the most elegant of musing-wine~ This is positively beautiful~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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KimW Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 268Medford, Oregon, USA |
Your writing is exquisite & I am quickly becoming a fan. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
and then...the butterfly took flight..... your soul soars with this one Lauren. Absolutely stunning stuff LC.  Like a red brick, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very lovely, your words are always a treat to the eyes and heart M |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JanetMarie~ It really has, hasnt it? now that you mentioned it to me....I am grateful for your words and understanding....thanks always sweet butterfly....HUGSSSS ~~ Nancy~ thank you I have been 'trying' new styles and form.....thank you for picking one of my favorite lines as well....HUGSSSS I do appreciate your words so much.... ~~ Barry~ thank you kindly for your thoughts....hugsss ~~ Noah~ thank you always for your vibrant replies....and happy tones....much needed, much enjoyed here....HUGSSS ~~ Karen~ I have never written tai chi, I am glad you found peace with in these words...thank you... ~~ Chris~ Thank you...HUGSSS ~~ Bill~ Thanks for your thoughts sir....they are much appreciated.... ~~ Tara~ I needed that hug--- HUGSSS to you....thank you..... ~~ Lyra~ Colorful and peaceful hugssss back to you, so good to see ya, I hope you are feeling a little better? ~~ Larry~ She is isnt she? (JM) thanks friend... ~~ Lori~ Thank you for your lovely thoughts, appreciate you much...HUGSSS ~~ Dave~ awww sweet friend, you give me far more credit then I deserve, my mosy humbled thanks.....HUGSS ~~ Marge~ your comments are always so touching...HUGSSSS sweet friend... ~~ KimW~ thank you for that....good to see you...HUGSSS ~~ ~D~ luv ya girlie, thanks for your butterfly reply.... ~~ Moon~ appreciate your thoughts, thanks for stopping by.... ~~ Love and Peace to all..... poet friendsLauren~ ~Sinking fast into an ocean of you, what if I told you, what if I said that I love you do we dare cross that line between your heart and mine~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-26-2002 09:47 AM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Imagery that abounds in tranquil setting ~ this reminds me of some favorite songs of mine, an epilogue of one in particular came to my mind and I could hear it while reading this excellent write. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
picturesque, flowing verse that takes my spirit along the shores with you |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Lauren, perhaps one of the loveliest poems I have seen from you, I say unhesitatingly that it should be in every poet's library... and in every non-poet's heart... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
truly my friend, the words flow from you as does that water from the earth. . . perhaps, you have even come from that water. . . you know that I love this. . . for all the same reasons. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I love your words. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautifully done! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Opeth~ humbled by your reply, thank you so much.....which music did you hear??? ~~ Martin~ so glad your spirit took you there, thank you for letting me know.... ~~ Soleil Noir~ I am very, very humbled by your gracious comment...thank you so much....HUGSSS ~~ Sven~ maybe I am perhaps, a concept to ponder on, an inspiring thought....thank you...friend ~~ bsquirrel~ that is so very kind of you....you added a big smile to my face...thank you sir! ~~ Martie~ Thank you lady.... ~~~~~ poets friends....Lauren~ ~Sinking fast into an ocean of you, what if I told you, what if I said that I love you do we dare cross that line between your heart and mine~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-26-2002 07:43 PM).] |
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