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First Sight.....No Date
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First Sight.....No Date |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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First Sight, No Date A boring hot bus ride I think as I sit near the back. Holding my books in my lap, attempting to keep from spilling them. Shy, quiet, imaginative and curious, alone. I feel the lurch, hear the squeek of brakes, the bus stopped. I saw her out of the corner of my eye. Tall, buxom, great sweater, warm radiant smile, funny little giggle. I wanted to know her, I had to know her..... What would I ever do?. How could I, Mr. ordinary, the klutz ever get close to this gem? What could I possibly have that would interest her? I can smell her fragrance. White Shoulders I think? I need to get closer, maybe move up to the next seat. My heart races with anticipation, hands shaking, palms wet. I am so afraid to ask if I, a mere mortal may sit near a goddess. She sits so close yet so very distant from me. Quietly chatting with another young woman. Straining to hear them, they are ignoring me. How can they not see me? Are they talking about me? What do I have to do to get their attention? Surely I should not have to get out of my seat. That takes courage, guts, a cautious step. She might say no, tell me go soak myself or something. I have to do it, I can’t wait for this rendezvous to spawn. I have to have the courage. Wait, she has noticed me. Her sparkling blue eyes fastening on mine. Will she speak? Or should I even care, eye to eye is OK by me. The muscles in my throat constrict, I can’t speak. The bus stops, my goddess is leaving. I dropped my books, I fall behind. Love is lost again... Moderators....IF you feel this should be in prose, please move.... It is a series of poems I wrote.. can be quite enjoyable...A fun read... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I find that when I see a woman that really catches my attention it is almost impossible not to say or do something...has something to do with the reasoning that I rarely see a woman that really catches my attention so when I do I know that I must act...James |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
YES JM...act....but in this story, this is a shy young man of about 16. I know him well... |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Magnus... not your norm; yet very appealing, romantic. Love at first sight can sometimes be awkward. Enjoyed the bus ride!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ivy Rose....My muse has deserted me for the moment....This is first page of a series in a young man's quest to find his true love. I did this about 18 months ago...hope you can enjoy it...and watch the love grow as the series goes along... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy oh my goodness this is utterly utterly superb, hah I’m glad Krissy has gone home and I can get to write on this first. Why is that, because this is seriously good writing. Not your normal writing at all. But oh how fresh and vibrant it is. I swear I can hear the boys rasping breath, hear the heart pounding in his chest. Well done darling boy utterly utterly well done. I really love this from you, write more please   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
this was great read and try this next time ya see this or for that matter any goddess yer taken by invite her to hear one of your engaging poems at a reading... Magnus......mark |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Magnus dear poet, I am interested in the rest of this story. You know, sometimes we females find it difficult to start up a conversation as well. Maybe "Miss. White Shoulders" was just as smitten by you. Love the choice of perfume too!! Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy...darling girl... Stay tuned for the next part....You will enjoy this...It was a fun write for me.. Thanx.. Mark....IF I told you who she is in real life....I would be letting the cat out of the Bag way too soon.....Thanx... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Chris....I LOVE White Shoulders!!!!! MY all time favorite... Hang on to your chair...it does nothing but become fun to keep up with.... Thanx!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ha!! I knew my sister was going to say something about the perfume!! Beat me to it! We both used to wear it and I just recently bought another bottle again! As far as the presentation...I think it's just fine for here in Open and I can tell already we are all going to love watching this story unfold. Well done my friend, ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy....I knew there was something about you that I liked......Just had not put all of the pieces together....YEP...I love White Shoulders.... And YES...sit back...enjoy the ride...I have these in my archived poetry....Thought I would do this to relax a little and take the pressure of posting off of me... You will enjoy this...Trust me on that! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh Barry, I too am a moderator currently and I believe this belongs right here in Open, I love it! (big hugggsssss) This sounds like such a wonderful series in the making, sweet friend, I can't wait to see him finally fall in serenidipity upon the one he loves, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The muscles in my throat constrict, I can’t speak. The bus stops, my goddess is leaving. I dropped my books, I fall behind. Love is lost again... I love this, Magnus... and look forward to the next episode. *S* Yanno, I remember thinking meetings would be easier after I grew up... they didn't. LOL |
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