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Flirting With My Ego
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Flirting With My Ego |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I didn’t know her But she smiled and ordered me a drink Then turned to talk to a friend While glancing my way as if to include me In the conversation she was having Or perhaps wanting me to know The things she said. Her words told of a struggle With a soon to be Ex if only The settlement could be reached And she could get on with her life With a giggle She looked again at me and leaned over To speak to me, letting the top Of her blouse gap open and reveal Creamy tops of breast held in a white lace I smiled as best I could while trying to keep my eyes In appropriate places as she slid over next to me And told the waitress to set up another round We drank and chatted for a while And then the evening ended But not before I was touched By her attention |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Magnificant writing...reminds me of my friend Jesse...everytime we hang out together it seems like he meets another woman...a new love interest...don't hang out with him as much anymore because I have a girlfriend and I find that I am not looking for another...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sometimes the best touch is the one with the eyes...good job here...I liked the tone, I liked watching... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Enjoyed this Ron...felt as though I was sitting right there watching... and it left me with smiling eyes... yes, feels good to have ones ego flirted with.  ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, you tend to put the reader "there" and that is very cool...great write  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
James: Appreciate your comments my friend. Unlike your friend I rarely meet a woman that pays that much attention to me. Perhaps that is why this was written Sunshine: Yes sometimes that is the best touch Enchantress: glad I could work a bit of magic on the words to take you there SEA: Thank you my friend... nice of you to say... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But not before I was touched By her attention ======================= love the possiblities of that line.... this made me think of Iambe... must I BEG for her to get some attention. *L* very cool write Capt. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Feel good moments..I enjoyed this so. You deserve them..even the peek of lace! Wink*~ I must catch up with your wonderful verse. Sincerely, Regina |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh, I enjoyed this! Could almost hear the ice cubes clinking in the patrons glasses. Well done. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Cat Hair~ A tender touching moment...I love the last two lines ~ they speak of a soft and quiet gratitude. *hugs* ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Very nicely captured! Made me smile. A blossom in an untended garden. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, your wonderful words always make me smile and capture every moment! (big huggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron I like this intimate look into the place where you are...it is real and makes me want to give you a hug. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ I'm a 'flirt' ... so the title grabbed me~ I found it a poignantly appreciative read~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I love flirting almost as much as being flirted with...great, as you said, for the ego. The last few poems I've read from you have definetly become favorites. And like JM, wouldn't mind a visit to see lambe myself. Wanna pick up JM and make it a road trip? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I feel I was invited to share a private moment... you definitely put the reader THERE. *S* This leaves me with smiles, Cpat... I like it very much. *S* |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes. . . this is a moment that is almost universal. . . but yet, is wholly yours. . . well done my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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