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Open Poetry #20

5 LB. Hammer of a Heart

Mark Coburn
Member

since 2002-01-24

Posts 71

0 posted 2002-04-15 05:54 PM

surrounding me
engulfing my being
the sharp shine
of cold steel
the endless labyrinth
of wires...winding to
the call of midday light
within the shadows
of all that is blue
bordering on deeper
than a space between
the junction of (2)

plastered on the wreck
of a dream, there
will always be a sheen
cause the light was bright
a subtle tone soothed
us on those cold nights
that I cherish for sure
felt a bit like a tilt-a-whirl
fact was ya couldn't see me
as I twirled, it's a creation
kinda thang....amidst this joy
interaction brings, to the supreme
heights in nightly flights
that soar on cyber waves
out and over the city
of Baltimore....never will understand
the lay of the place, the worry
on the land....the over all lack
of a plan....kinda way it all seems to
happen time and time and time again
so here's to the friend....and wash it down
with a case of the bitter end.....WIREMAN

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-04-15 08:43 PM

*s...now this would sound good accompanied by music... I enjoyed your mix of words

Maureen

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2002-04-15 11:12 PM

What a nice rhythmic flow to this...
"felt a bit like a tilt-a-whirl
fact was ya couldn't see me
as I twirled, it's a creation
kinda thang"
I've never beeen to Baltimore. Thanks for the visit. Great line:
"never will understand
the lay of the place, the worry
on the land..."

Mark Coburn
Member

since 2002-01-24

Posts 71

3 posted 2002-04-16 07:51 AM

yes my friends this is gonna turn into a performance piece I do believe....thanx for taking the time to read and respond......

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

4 posted 2002-05-16 01:32 PM

Have you put this to music yet?

Dawn

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-05-16 01:40 PM

A Baltimore version of "The Wichita Lineman."
Go get 'em

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