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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA 
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Why must there be death? Death is sad. So why must we bare sadness? Because nobody can stop death. Why do people die? Why must our loved ones die? It makes me mad. But nobody can stop death from happening. Which makes me sad. All I can say is she is at rest. But why must we deal with death? Because Death is part of life. So we can`t stop the envitable. That is DEATH. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Neala Member
since 1999-08-21
Posts 262Florida, USA |
I liked the way you put it it was sad but honest and got to the point....I liked it a lot keep writing I hope you stay here. -Neala |
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Empress New Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 4AZ, USA |
Your poem did express a lot of emotion that many people feel when faced with the death. Being new, I am hesitant to offer much in the way of critique, so I will simply state this: the emotional value of this poem is excellent. There was a lot of repition of the same lines, I found that a tad distracting, but at the same time, it really pushed the point home. Keep writing! There is great promise in your honest emotional writing |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I enjoyed your poem, loner... Unfortunately, death is a part of life and nobody knows how long their life is going to be...and, thats probably for the best. Wouldn't you hate to know if you were going to die next week or next month? But...real sudden death is no fun either. During the past 3 years, I have lost loved ones in both ways...and having been through that...I think the sudden way is probably worse because of the shock value.  ~ poetic hugsLyra |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
This is always a fair topic to write on as well as the meaning of life, love and hate ....I look forward to seeing you put more questions and answers out in your writes ...and I agree about the sadness, feel mad about this fact of life like you do and realize more and more that life is as we experience it...all that is temporary that is..nice go  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Imagine a world where no one died...and aging was limitless....Would we turn into a prune at age 305, or what? Could we feed everyone if there were no deaths to keep things in balance? Hmmmm? You have expressed an honest feeling. Death is so starkly real....it looms out there over the horizon for all of us.. And our memories of those we have loved, who have died...continue on until that fateful day.. Welcome to PiP...enjoyed the post...makes one think... |
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