Open Poetry #20 |
I can remember a bit of beauty |
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I can remember a bit of beauty -- her petals unfolding in the chair. I can remember a bit of beauty -- her dark mascara stare. I can remember a bit of beauty -- out there on the stair. I swear the rain was not damp. I remember she was not there. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the softness of her laugh. I can remember a bit of beauty -- like a summer epitaph. I can remember a bit of beauty -- like winter on the sea. I swear the shore was not sand. I remember she was not with me. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the steam from off the street. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the shadows of her feet. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the secrets of her face. I swear her eyes were not stone. I cannot remember the place. She said burn ... together. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I can remember a bit of beauty -- her petals unfolding in the chair. I can remember a bit of beauty -- her dark mascara stare. Mr.Squirrel, you sure do have a wonderful way with those words...It must be a rodent thing. I like your new picture. ~ furry rodent hugs Lyra |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I can remember a bit of beauty -- the steam from off the street. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the shadows of her feet. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the secrets of her face. I swear her eyes were not stone. I cannot remember the place. Damn, if that just didn't hit it, square on the head. [This message has been edited by Duncan (06-09-2002 01:47 AM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you both enjoyed my whinin' and mopin'. And th' picture. *wink* She said burn ... together. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
tsk...to me...I CAN'T. I tend to forget--immediately... much to my dismay, and sometimes? to my relief... love ya mike...for yr understanding. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mike I love that little tid bit at the end of the last verse. This entire poem is much more than just a bit of beauty, it's beautiful all the way through! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
BSQ...this is wonderful! The repetition works so well in this one... gads...a Keeper! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I can remember a bit of beauty -- her petals unfolding in the chair. I can remember a bit of beauty -- her dark mascara stare. I can remember a bit of beauty -- out there on the stair. I swear the rain was not damp. I remember she was not there. I can remember a bit of beauty -- the softness of her laugh. I can remember a bit of beauty -- like a summer epitaph. I can remember a bit of beauty -- like winter on the sea. I swear the shore was not sand. I remember she was not with me. =============================== your imagery is so--SO much more than a bit of beauty.... I do so love the way your mind works and seeing things thru your eyes. When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Mike, Just like Lyra says you have a way with words, squirrels a perseptive little animals anyway...hehe [This message has been edited by ecrivan (06-09-2002 12:44 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, I might have to call this your best yet. It's wonderful. Sandra |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Loved your format here Mike... how are things then???? I'm sure you'll let me know sometime...so I'll be awaitin!!! Take care sweets!! `~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mike darling boy this is simply exquisite, I truly love this diamond from you. You have an amazing ability to write with such clarity. And this had me utterly entranced by your writing As always darling heart you excel and I love it I love it utterly utterly. This is superb writing darling boy Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing writing here Mike! Loved the repetition...it added so much. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BSquirrel~ My god ... this is beautiful !!! You have grown so much in your writing ... it's a true pleasure to read you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
She said burn ... together. |
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