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The Rise And Fall Of Wealth At Heart
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The Rise And Fall Of Wealth At Heart |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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With three ex-wives expelled from mind. In sullen space he loomed and moped his distant memories mulled in smoke, with pillars of distaste inside. But every day his heart evoked silent thoughts of love regained a search for happiness through pain. Filled flush with wealth under his roof true to a fault with money's hope enticing minds with regal show and words to pitch his worth aloof. His song would trap a callow soul, with flash of kindness in deceit a merchant of contrived relief. But when she came one month, to clean, The darkness of his thoughts went dry, then sunward went his soul on high and filled with life his heart broke free! The shadows of his latter pride were lit with daylight and unchained from the guileness of his game. Then, too, she brought his faith to swell. His needs beheld in her sweet face uplifted by her tender grace. On him, like gentle rain she fell to water wisdom once displaced. He offered her his wealth and fame and at her feet he threw his gain. He watched her soft eyes slowly drop Stoned innocence filled her light laugh then she spoke pure unabashed deep words of love spilled from her thoughts. He heard a river's length of love to last, about her boyfriend and their plans and her eyes glowed solely for her man. Through years of trading he had fought where friends were shallow, fierce and dim where all the world was made to win and render profits at all cost. Yet this songbird sang over him from her nest of silver dreams and left him helpless and unclean. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is awesome....If I read it right... A man, not very nice...deceitful, finds a woman who he desperately wants... Yet, finds he may not have her...for she has already found love... And there he is...dashed...even with all of his ill earned wealth... Am I close... This is outstanding ET... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You're right on Magnus!! Thanks for taking the time to read this and for the encouraging comments...Much appreciated!! |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
This is a wonderful,powerful piece. I love poems that draw you into the story, and have almost a moral as an ending to leave you thinking. Good work! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Bags for the comments....I appreciate! Vandana....I thank you for dropping in to read this!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric A wonderful story poem...with deeper meaning about what's important. Have you ever written a story in other forms? I think you would be very good at it. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes. . . to have all. . . and yet. . . to have nothing. . . well done Sir. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggsssssss) Oh Eric, though I haven't ever encountered this situation, this is a feeling I am sure so many can relate to, and my heart cries out to them all when one loves someone so much but they already love another and love is sacrificed that way. (sad sigh) This is sad but beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
That was.... wow... Awesome! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I really enjoy this style that you have. A story well told. Sandra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie...Yes I do write in other fields but never seem to have the time to complete anything...I thank you for the comments! Thanks Sven....All the riches in the world can't buy true love! Thank you Noah you're always so kind! Skyfire I want to thank you for the upbeat comment! Cat moon I'm glad you like the format....Just something new I was trying.....Thanks for reading!! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ This is soooooooo well done~ You SHOULD make the time to complete more of these story poems~ This is very good~ 'He watched her soft eyes slowly drop Stoned innocence filled her light laugh then she spoke pure unabashed deep words of love spilled from her thoughts. He heard a river's length of love to last, about her boyfriend and their plans and her eyes glowed solely for her man.' What a wonderful testament to the lady's true love~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Marge....Glad you dropped in to read this and I appreciate the positive comments! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you very much Marge, I appreciate your comments. |
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