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If Only, If Only, If Only I Knew
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If Only, If Only, If Only I Knew |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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If only I knew of where you are If one could wish, dream of afar If only a word once would be heard If only, if only, if only...one word If roses red were placed in a vase A goblet of clear matching in trace Trace of beauty in beauty chase If only I knew, knew of your place Stars dot the eyes of heaven bright Man of the moon searching in night Comets trail tears of crystal ice in shimmers search, not once but twice If only the breeze could whisper to me take my hand to where you will be If only a brook would babble your name If only, if only, if only...you came As morn brings a ray to my eyes while pillows swallow tears and cries My soul shall walk the halls for you If only, if only, if only...I knew |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) Oh Barry, I know this feeling of yearning ever so much, I wish I could be like Superman sometimes and be able to fly around the world and go the distance to meet my dream girl Joanna, but while I know we ay not have super-powers, if we believe in our hearts and work each day to find out what we must do to get there, we will succeed! (sigh) This is excellent and sincere, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Barry, this is outstanding writing! Your BEST of course...yes, it is your best! Love this piece and into my library it goes. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah....I always appreciate your thoughts and your kindness... Nancy.....here we go again....the redhead and decisions problemo..... Maybe I need to start writing some really bad poetry....so that you can pick my worst one.... Me thinks you would have the same problem... Hmmmmmm....let me seeee... What can I do?? |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry This was absolutely stunning. Your writing just goes from strength to strength and I am enjoying the journey every step of the way. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is very good writing, Barry  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sue, I am pleased to take you on this walk in my poetry...Your words always give me a smile...and bring more of my words to the pen and the paper of my heart.. Michael, from you, the master balladeer.. means a lot...thank you... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling heart and the one who drifts among stars to harvest their light. You know I utterly utterly utterly adore this one, you do these so well, actually there’s isn’t anything that you don’t do well. It matters not whether it’s rhymed, metered, free verse, haiku, senryu and etceteras until I come to the end of time. Stars dot the eyes of heaven bright Man of the moon searching in night Comets trail tears of crystal ice in shimmers search, not once but twice If only the breeze could whisper to me take my hand to where you will be If only a brook would babble your name If only, if only, if only...you came Oh these lines they are sooooooo incredibly beautiful I love this utterly, in fact I love the whole poem but these lines they are written in starlight This is simply perfect as always darling boy and I love it I love it utterly. One day darling heart you may write something that doesn’t make me dizzy with delight, but I doubt it, your writing is always wonderful. While I have breath I will always read your words and adore them.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
As morn brings a ray to my eyes while pillows swallow tears and cries My soul shall walk the halls for you If only, if only, if only...I knew You always put a very special and romantic touch on everything you write, Barry... this is beautiful.  ~ special hugsLyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy, you know I am going to have a lot of difficulty getting out of this room (swelled head)...so that I can go to bed some time tonight...BUT I LOVE IT!!!! Lyra, glad to see the tail is flying high and that you have gotten GOOD news...My prayers will continue for you... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow....can't quite bring anything else out right now, but "wow!" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The word "only" after that "on the condition that, word "if" is a real nice touch to the lines you've written here! Superb work Magnus! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"if onlies"...nasty little creatures... tingling under skin deep into the night seems to me their redeeming feature is to make a poet burn candlelight [Heh...IF ONLY I had written this...] You do this very well, Magnus... |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
Nothing more stirring to the soul than a poem about unrequited love. Sad but true. we've all been there. Excellent. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dixie....being speechless speaks a volume of words to this writer...thank you Eric...thank you...I can't explain, but I felt very strongly of putting the "if only" into the poem..Adds power to the words.. JM...thank you my Hawaiian friend..Mahalo.. Sun...IF only these words you had writ If only these thoughts just a bit If only the mome' had come to you If only, If only weren't me...but you.. Me thinks would have been a beautiful poem! Bags123...Interesting Pen Name... Thank You very much.. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Sometimes there are reasons beyond our control that we can't know. There is contentment in knowing they've grown in our hearts. Very nice write. |
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