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| Open Poetry #20 |
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Shadows of the City |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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A summer storm lightening striking the landscape- reflections in the lake mirrored by rain and so my lips are not my own when the symphony fades and dawn softly places unlit candles in windows The palm of my hands appear faithful –with wisdom-- memories of mystical faces, those, with out names & unmistakable tilting of head or movement of eyelids Darkness of habit impede the view- of autumns that pass in afternoon curtains and mornings new rise-- here I stand unrecognizable to you ripples of the water extending far beyond the images that present the surface of fragile breaths unraveling the chants of life the ravens dance wrapped in sapphire remembrance So I close my eyes-- still waters- standing in silence holding red roses I would rather have one breath of his hair, one kiss of his mouth, one touch of his hand than an eternity without it. [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (06-05-2002 09:12 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
simply divine...like the flowing of a fine wine... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Wow, I just love the illusions and spells you cast in your poems, sweet friend, this is soooooo beautifully descriptive and filled with heart! (kiss on cheek) I just love reading your words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Storm on sweet friend. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Lauren, this is another fine, dreamy, magical piece. Into the library you go.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Magnus took my words.... |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Remember as kids when we use to make shadows upon the walls with our hands .... I use to call it "Shadow Dancing". This piece helps me remember such playful moments before dawn, trying to amuse my younger siblings, and myself, who were awaken by an early morning storm .... Thank you for the fond memeories and reborn smiles. Peace be with you. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ My gosh ... this is just so delicate and lovely~ 'dawn softly places unlit candles in windows' What a gorgeous thought~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, Lovely write, enjoyed the read. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
..."the ravens dance" boy, that just put all kinds of mystery in this, my friend... enjoyed. jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lauren~Exquisite as always...beautiful! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well. . . now I know what's in your eyes. . . just. . . beautiful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful!!! Charisma |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and so my lips are not my own when the symphony fades and dawn softly places unlit candles in windows ============================== of autumns that pass in afternoon curtains and mornings new rise-- here I stand unrecognizable to you ripples of the water extending far beyond the images that present the surface of fragile breaths unraveling the chants of life the ravens dance wrapped in sapphire remembrance So you close your eyes-- still waters- standing in silence holding red roses ================================ this is hauntingly, mystically, stunning... the imagery is superb...so very lovely ... the expressions are breathtaking. You wrote this so that its like we are reading (witnessing) it thru lace curtains and candle light. mothymeWhen man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lauren, again.....there are no words that can do this piece justice. wonderful hon... Like a red brick, |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Lauren This is just gorgeous poetry.... "I stand unrecognizable to you ripples of the water extending far beyond the images that present the surface of fragile breaths unraveling the chants of life the ravens dance wrapped in sapphire remembrance So I close my eyes-- still waters- standing in silence holding red roses" You've got a powerful muse lady poet! |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
the ravens dance wrapped in sapphire remembrance So I close my eyes-- still waters- standing in silence holding red roses ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Wonderful writing! You really did a nice job with this one. Deb |
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bags123 Member
since 2002-06-06
Posts 128 |
WOWIE, WOW! I'm fresh out of superlatives. To bad this deserves all of them. Great work! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is nice, Lauren. Very pretty! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Your writing seems to get more intense and beautiful every time I read. Sandra |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Love to all.....I appreciate the warm comments and kind responses from all..... I wanted to come in and thank you all one to one, but time has not been on my side, but I feel the hearts here....  Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I feel the dreaminess here, Lauren... Its like being part of a magical landscape... ~ mystical hugsLyra |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Oh so lovely, this is! and so my lips are not my own when the symphony fades and dawn softly places unlit candles in windows That snippet alone is wonderful -- combined with the rest of the piece it ices a delicious poem! ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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