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Elan
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since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

0 posted 2002-06-04 09:08 AM

Garnet & Vanilla Days

No one knows the thought
she had
when she donned garnet color
of her mourning’s sad

her thoughts ran deep gold

for, by sunlight,
thin cut of garnet ring on one finger
remained a promise of
gold memory’s linger

then deep cut of her other ring
indicative of blood weepings
she senses, on vanilla scented mornings
memories seeping

she donned then the garnet shimmer,
enhanced it, dripping garnet necklace
and earrings’ glimmer

recollecting his dabbling
in garnet once
how thought fingers had reached deep
into her soul
past red, into arcane dulcet of
her, into blood’s beat
of sure
having found her heat
so pure,

now scented skin of vanilla’s bless
once having fed hunger’s deep
caress
it was a match of wild excess
a stronger belief to
compress

the blood garnet of her days
a mellowing in vanilla haze
garnet shimmers in her veins
blood gone gold upon the wane

No one knows the thought
she had
when she donned garnet color
of her mourning’s sad

her thoughts running before the fold

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-06-04 09:21 AM

Elan, so nice to see you here
gracing our pages of blue...
with your wonderful garnet words.
THIS is an exquisite piece...
very very beautifully penned
with thoughts so deep...that I
shall keep this to read again....
and again...
to enjoy many times over.
~Morning Hugs~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-06-04 09:21 AM

how thought fingers had reached deep
into her soul
past red, into arcane dulcet of
her, into blood's beat
of sure
having found her heat
so pure,

now scented skin of vanilla's bless
once having fed hunger's deep
caress
it was a match of wild excess
a stronger belief to
compress

the blood garnet of her days
a mellowing in vanilla haze
garnet shimmers in her veins
blood gone gold upon the wane

No one knows the thought
she had
when she donned garnet color
of her mourning's sad

her thoughts running before the fold
========================

well this is just exquisite...
the vocab, phrasing and rhyme is poetically sating and the emote paired with the imagery employ of color and scent made for sensual sensory saturation.
very very nice Elan...how lovely this jewel of an inspire is.

When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations
When mans concern narrows, poetry reminds him the diversity of existence

JFK

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-06-04 09:24 AM

Elan

Just beautiful! You wear it well!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2002-06-04 09:35 AM

enjoyed this view of the blush stone
and the scent sounds too

lovely images

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-06-04 11:43 AM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Elan, this is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I always love reading your wonderful words as they always are flooding with such gorgeous imagery and meaning! (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2002-06-04 01:20 PM

This requires contemplation, indeed.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2002-06-04 01:26 PM

Elan
Good work.......I enjoyed the depth of the theme!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2002-06-04 10:04 PM

Elan...simply this...IWIHWT!

Excellent...very well done...

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

9 posted 2002-06-04 10:22 PM

garnet shimmers in her veins
blood gone gold upon the wane

Beautifully written, Elan...
thanks for sharing it with us.

~ garnet and vanilla hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

10 posted 2002-06-04 10:28 PM

your style is graceful and imaginative

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

11 posted 2002-06-05 01:48 PM

This is beautiful and brings in two of my favorite things--garnets and vanilla. Nice thoughtful write that I will read again and again.

Shenachie

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