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MIdsummerRain
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0 posted 2002-06-04 02:59 AM


Then I whispered...

Can she soar, love?
Tell me, can she fly?

Then it is you who brings hermore pain...For I am just a girl whose in love with you...

For in much wisdom is much grief
& he who increases knowledge
    increases sorrow...
                  Eccl. 1:18

© Copyright 2002 Rayne Leigh - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-06-04 03:05 AM


I love the way your mind works.

and yes...it's true what you write. I like the whatzdawoid here? I like the conundrum of the perplexity, of being in love with someone who loves a being on a pedestal...very few words you write, but? I read much into it...and if I'm wrong? grin..let me be, I LIKE IT THIS WAY.

nice...

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2002-06-04 05:48 AM


Very nice...James
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3 posted 2002-06-04 11:35 AM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, I hope everything works out in the end, sweet friend, you deserve the greatest happiness always and I know love is destined to fill your heart with joy! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rayne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
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between the gutter & the stars
4 posted 2002-06-04 03:54 PM


the title drew me in so quick, for i know it is a truth.

these types are my favorite. conveying a most powerful message in such a short verse, but with so much thought... it gets better the more you read it.
what a talent.

the clouds aren't such a bad place to wait. it's comfy. i never waited there.
no pun intended, but just rain on your love's parade, hit 'em with lightning, and make them come to their senses. hehehe



"The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite."

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (06-04-2002 03:57 PM).]

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2002-06-04 03:55 PM


Short, sad, heart wretching piece.....well done!
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