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midsummer rain's ocean challenge
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midsummer rain's ocean challenge |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
*the end at the pier* reflections in a wavy mirror and this face looks so damn old and i look out beyond the pier the world feels like it's whole... i can still get lost inside your eyes you perfume smells like good old times But your hands are cold and we're not the same and these unsung words don't mean a thing. The dim lights try to pierce the fog but there's not much there to see. The rain drifts down, and i close my eyes... the frigid feeling of being free. your voice is still inside my head your laughter still puts me to bed your the last part of the old life i been tryin to live in but this time, i'll close my eyes and i won't be givin in. Everything is nothing when you need every bit of one thing. The ocean water don't sting 'cause i won't bleed and i won't sing. My heart begins to paddle out and I swear to god I'll make it and I'll leave you in the wake. it won't take me the wave is breaking and I'll try for the horizon one last time. "The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite." |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (BIG HUGGGSSSSSSS) This is soooooo sad but filled with hope too, sweet friend, I know you can do it if you always put your heart to it, so go for it and always follow your heart and find magic when you stand off that pier! (sigh) We all believe in you so much, sweet friend, this sounds like such a wonderful challenge, I'll give it a try too, YAY, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ya know, I'll be comforted to know another "midnight" will be posting beautiful poetry while I am away for awhile. I'm already enjoying your writing. Thanks, midnitesun, Kacy |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
the people in here are so friendly! noah: i look forward to your well-versed response to the challenge. this is a fun and straightforward one. thanks for the responses too. you're very kind. midnitesun: thanks. i'm glad you feel i'm cool enough to share the name.  "The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite." |
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ULookSoPrecious Junior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 16NC, U.S.A. |
Very well written. The first stanza especially touched my heart. Keep your spirits up. Take Care, Kris "Nobody, not even the rain, has such small hands." -ee cummings |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the frigid feeling of being free. your voice is still inside my head your laughter still puts me to bed your the last part of the old life i been tryin to live in but this time, i'll close my eyes and i won't be givin in. Everything is nothing when you need every bit of one thing. The ocean water don't sting 'cause i won't bleed and i won't sing. My heart begins to paddle out and I swear to god I'll make it and I'll leave you in the wake. it won't take me the wave is breaking and I'll try for the horizon one last time. =========================== oh man...this rocks!!!....Welcome to Poety Land MS...I am going to be a fan, that i can see all ready I loved the ache and longing you wrapped in these melodic melancholy lines... very very cool write..I'd say you met the challenge and them some with this soulful offering. I look forward to more of your work. peace and poetry, poet of the sun jm When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling here, but also puzzled...it's deja vu all over again!!! grin...hmmm....if I didn't know better? (and I don't) I'd swear you were a drummer I used to keep time with! I exit scratching me head. (The only way I could be sure, is if I heard the "solo"...) grinnin' again--ENJOYED. |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
"...Everything is nothing when you need every bit of one thing..." Your words have touched more than my heart; & my challenge has been won, by you MidnightSon With much admiration ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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