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Martie
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0 posted 2002-06-03 12:09 PM



Something About Air

There is something about air.
In certain quality of sun it dances with silver
and plays about with wind
as lovers on an empty dance floor
it holds extraordinary grace.

Even the brick of old slanted wall
becomes a playground for its touch,
for air transparent holds the dawn
making millions of colors on it glow.
I think it finds the leak of time,
there between the roar and sand
and fills it with the perfume of
millions of years around again.

It is so casually inclined to fill us
that the motion of our chest
is but gathering for eyes that see a breast,
until we come someday to find
the filling and emptying is a test,
its importance to makes each minute last
for life and breath are too soon past.


© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-06-03 12:21 PM


Even the brick of old slanted wall
becomes a playground for its touch,
for air transparent holds the dawn
making millions of colors on it glow.
I think it finds the leak of time,
there between the roar and sand
and fills it with the perfume of
millions of years around again.

What a cool sensory verse, Martie!  Played with all of them!


I'm falling even more in love with you
Letting go of all I've held onto

Lifehouse

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2 posted 2002-06-03 06:35 AM



Something about air
when lilt with verse
it begins a new dance
forever rehearsed...

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3 posted 2002-06-03 07:52 AM


was lovely this weekend..
so overcast you could see the air
like a heavy gray blanket

(grin) enjoyed it ms martie

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4 posted 2002-06-03 08:24 AM


In certain quality of sun it dances with silver
and plays about with wind
as lovers on an empty dance floor
it holds extraordinary grace.

Even the brick of old slanted wall
becomes a playground for its touch,
for air transparent holds the dawn
making millions of colors on it glow.
I think it finds the leak of time,
there between the roar and sand
and fills it with the perfume of
millions of years around again
=================================

what a very very cool write...
after reading this gem of pen..methinks you touched air...even held it in your hand for moment. I do so love the way your poetic mind works..this is awesome.

Cant stand up for fallin apart
Cant see through this veil across my heart, over you-
Youll always be the one.
You were the first, youll be the last

Nan
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5 posted 2002-06-03 08:56 AM


Awesome - Simply AWESOME...
I'm picturing little particles of 'air' dancing in a stream of sunlight through my window.. and savoring it... Did I mention that this is AWESOME?..

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6 posted 2002-06-03 09:06 AM


Love this morning read Martie!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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7 posted 2002-06-03 09:24 AM


GR8!
The something about air is we need it to survive.
The something about your work is much the same

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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8 posted 2002-06-03 06:54 PM


'There is something about air.
In certain quality of sun it dances with silver
and plays about with wind'

'for air transparent holds the dawn
making millions of colors on it glow. '

Your imagery is very impressive, as always, Martie...I really enjoyed the pictures this one left with me...great write!

sp        

I've been down this road forever,
and the time has come to circle back home...

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9 posted 2002-06-03 07:15 PM




YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, yes, I love the message behind this poem, may we always live life to the fullest and always take the time to pirouette in the wind and fly the kites of our dreams patiently! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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10 posted 2002-06-03 08:15 PM


For life and breath are too soon past...

Superb ending...amazing isn't it....all of
the beauty we have in the air around us...
The one thing we must have...for without it,
we could no longer take in the luxury of
the scenery...

Thank You Martie for another awesome poem
of your skill and imagination...

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11 posted 2002-06-03 09:28 PM


Marty-I've always been a fan of your works, this one is no exception.  I remember two of my favorites by you, one is "Black Ice" and the other, I forget the title of, but remember the words of a winding precipice of a road and crossing the river of rocks remembering a fathers' smile.  Thank you for all your lovely poems.
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12 posted 2002-06-03 10:45 PM


The words you speak of air is true..
It's something I'd NEVER give to you!

Joe Lamando
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13 posted 2002-06-04 10:15 AM


I love how you take a simple topic and give it such grace.
Hugs,
Joe

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14 posted 2002-06-04 10:27 AM


MartieSis~

'air transparent holds the dawn'

Ahhhhhhhhhh !

I am thankful for the air
that breathes your poetry across my morning~

*Hugs*
~*Me*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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