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In Her Silence
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In Her Silence |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
He held sway behind the glass voice raised in sobbing plead quietly she stood at the edge suffering in silent bleed hear me! He cried with fervor heads turned in consolation she smiled, held her head up so no one saw her situation he gained notoriety and fame his squeaky wheel was oiled well she just lived on in desperation and sadly, no one could tell |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
it does good to speak up and be brave to do so but some just want attention and that is sad........good write yuh |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grand write... it shows a viewpoint beyond the screen. you have eyes that see "thru" and on into...now stop STARING AT US!!!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know, at first I started to hear the strains of Simon & Garfunkle and a man banging on glass, shouting "Elaine".... and then of course a second read, and I get a totally different story in my mind... good write, this... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WoW!! Excellent write here Sharon! ~hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Makes me think of a person with all of his baggage securely tucked away....as she watches and reflects on the other him... The one she knows....that they don't... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PVD, You always impress me with your writing. Enjoyed |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind comments. The origin of the poem rests in several areas. One of them is from a situation at work - we had a young employee who was always saying how much she needed help. In fact, I did a lot of her work without the supervisor's knowledge because I thought she was in trouble and really couldn't keep up. She resigned to move to California. She had two weeks to clean up her files. I got 5 of them - and believe me they are a mess! I don't know what she was doing but she sure wasn't working on them!!! There are others in the department that just plod along, don't complain about having too much work and somehow just get it done. But this young lady yelled out - and got help. And in the end, we discovered that we were doing most of her work! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is one of those universal themes that could be correlated to some aspect of just about everyone's life at one time or another... Very well done, m'friend..  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ This is so well done ... top-quality poetry~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Poet deVine, this is excellent! Great work! Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Sharon, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too am guilty for before demanding attention so very much when I was depressed and being abused by others at school and seeking no help from my dad and so I failed to be brave and try to battle my own demons, whereas now I regret that and try now to do all I can before I go seeking attention! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, your wonderful words are as golden as always, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sharon I guess I'm not as clever as the rest that know you so well but I could make up a thousand different stories out of this.....I do have an inkling or two. Thought stimulating writing for sure! I enjoyed the read! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the louder you yell, the less you're doing?? hmmmmm. . . perhaps that's why most people think of crying wolf. . . but, then again. . . there are those who never speak. . . and should. . . great work here. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well crafted, PdV Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (06-03-2002 04:54 PM).] |
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