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Here's My heart
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Here's My heart |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia 
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Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give If I stop to think to blink I second guess what if But before.. I breathe... Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give Like an echantress ... you could seduce my heart.. piece by piece tear it apart... split my my world in two... but in my heart I've always knew... Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give?... I remember the first day the hour i saw you those blue eyes... took my breath.. away and since I've never been the same... Now like a child I look at my shoes trying to find the words to choose stuttering... I open my lips to say... Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give?... Then my heart skips a beat as yousmile and through the tears you sweetly say to me... Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give?... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well that was simply lovely and could very well be a long song. I enjoyed the repetitive verses as they added to the strength of it. I realy enjoyed the smoothness of your writing and the poem. Oh, psst, I think you mean enchantress right? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh darn! Mysteria took my comment, for I too enjoyed the repetitiveness which made this into a song...well done, Brad! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Me too, Brad. It has such a songlike feeling. And a happy ending, I love those. Sandra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, this is beautiful…just beautiful Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give?... What else indeed?? What else would one need? All the gold in the world does not compare to a gift like this….a gift of the heart. Everything is possible in the game of life |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Brad this is beautiful... and as the others have said... I love the repetitive verse. Also love the line about enchantress.  Can't help loving that one! Good write here. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow...Brad? izzat you? I KNEW you were a teddy bear! no critique from me, and no silliness either. This is gorgeous! sometimes, sincerity is enough. sincerely, serenity |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! Oh Brad, this is wonderful, I too think this would make a wonderful love song, have you ever thought about turning your words into music? (big hugggsssssss) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brad, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautifully romantic! "Here's my heart, my soul ... my waking breath the moon... the stars ... and all of this I must give you all.. for what what else is there to give" You're right! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you! |
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