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Silver Slanted Finger
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Silver Slanted Finger |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Silver Slanted Finger The silver slanted finger touch of moon drizzles light across the plains of cities cool in the window it plays in the street and hides behind tall trees that wear their skirts high and drip berries in the spring It sees the pattern of life is not flat on the hills and valleys it rides to be water would and follow instead it digs into the meaning and wonders off following the pull of some magic that lives in dark Like a child beguiled by sign keep out it plays on the other side of the fence waiting for time to make a place to slide through yes the pattern buckles and tears sometimes and wears so thin in places that it seems gone The silver slanted fingers play like patterns weaving light and shadow they pull the berries from the tree beguile knowing the dripping sweet and sticky lick of dark waiting for a place to slide through and see following the pull toward the other side |
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haydenjames Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 164Antigua & Barbuda |
Moving accors the sky the moon tells much to all of us... good write. My poetry is at: http://www.thehayden.org |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've tried to write like this... it's not easy and I get in the way of me looking toward the ways of you, so I shall just Keep, and Read... You |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The silver slanted finger touch of moon drizzles light across the plains of cities cool in the window it plays in the street and hides behind tall trees that wear their skirts high and drip berries in the spring ================================== The silver slanted fingers play like patterns weaving light and shadow they pull the berries from the tree beguile knowing the dripping sweet and sticky lick of dark waiting for a place to slide through and see following the pull toward the other side ==================================== only you could create this image and hang the moon like this for us... you are awesome when Luna inspired.   |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
Many have tried but few can write about me in such a way. This is a magnificent work of art ... and to think ... beautiful. Let thy moon arise. William Blake |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You certainly pulled me into the entireity of this poem with your silver slanted pen. Once again Martie....beautiful images!! You've captured the mysticism wonderfully! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very nice write dear, (though I thought it was about that obscene jester I point at Balladeer every time he hits me with one of those mean terrible poems he writes about me), but I still wasn't disappointed.... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
haydenjames--The moon is quite a story teller for sure! Thanks for your reply. Karilea--I feel the same way about you! Janet Marie--Was just inspired by a thought in mind...for it was daylight. lunatic--and here I thought your luna was the crazy kind..not that lovely night light. Thanks so much for your shinning! Eric--Nice to have you pulled in for awhile..so I can give you a hay thanks! Toe--I would never want to disappoint you!! So glad you stopped by! [This message has been edited by Martie (05-30-2002 04:59 PM).] |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
sticky lick of dark Wow, wish I had thought of that line Martie... I love it! Beautiful poem as always Hon  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie, I like that line too as well as the others cool stuff babe |
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Cloudishness Junior Member
since 2002-05-27
Posts 15 |
Martie What a neat style! Wonderful personification and wordplay here. I love this! Jim Sullivan |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
I am only crazy when the moon's out and since I'm always out ... well, I'm always crazy with love |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cirrus...thanks for floating in sky over my moon. Dave--Thought you would. Jim--What a great reply...thanks! Lunatic--If you got to be crazy, that's a good thing to be crazy with...besides it made me smile. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh... another beautiful walk of a poem. Truly - like walking beneath trees or something... only problem: on the hills and valleys it rides to be water would and follow instead it digs into the meaning 'to be water would and follow'? Huh? That truly makes me go, huh? lol... otherwise - fairly damn exceptional...but then, that's no surprise is it dear? Love and stuff  K |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla yup...even caught me up..knew I should have changed it. What I was trying to say was...wanting to be water to be water, would, oh well..I keep learning..thanks, hon, for your honest eyes. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The silver slanted finger touch of moon drizzles light across the plains of cities cool in the window it plays in the street and hides behind tall trees that wear their skirts high and drip berries in the spring Only you, Martie...can paint the night sky in this manner... I wish I could write like you do.  ~ love your writing hugsLyra |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this so much. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You combine the elements so well, tipping the scales of innocense and the love that it believes in. The thoughts and verses you conjur up are breathtaking! Here's to you and cheers to your muse!! You're writing is something else and I am so happy to be reading you! |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
Martie, It's wonderful how you've given life to moonlight adding movement and form Hugs, Joe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieMoonSis~ Of course you 'knew' I'd find this delightful~ 'The silver slanted finger touch of moon drizzles light across the plains of cities cool in the window it plays in the street and hides behind tall trees that wear their skirts high and drip berries in the spring' I 'see' it .... I really 'see' it~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh Mistress of the magical words and pen of shining silver....Grace mine eyes in thy words of beauty...Let not thy soul be of one which thy heart does not speak of... For...thine heart and thy words sayeth much of thee.. Thank You! |
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