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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-05-29 08:33 PM


On Hair

There is still the little one inside
solemnly remembering
how hairstyles matured the woman,

or was it how a mature woman
wore hairstyles?

Oh, the little one waits
for those days of maturity to wind
and bind hair up and women see oh
yes she is ready

and men see a fine neck ready for…

well…yes…

On hair…

there is the phrase,
letting one’s hair down and oh!
to unpin clips and let
loose the tresses

then stretch to roll one’s neck, gently
tossing back strands of auburn
or gold, or titian hair, a strand or two
left toward the front to trail down
to show curves how curves lay…

well…yes…

ahem.

On hair…

Times and tides dictate to all men,
and all women…

so men have no time to groom, and let
their hair grow long, and women
have no time for ministrations and
have theirs cut short…

short does not allow for
letting one’s hair down

and therein lies a woman’s problem,

for when she cannot let
her hair down

and feel again her woman tresses slip through
her fingers let alone his fingers…

when she cannot relax and
speak her mind
behind curves hiding curves

she tends to hold more in than she
thought…
for there could be no time to relax
if one isn’t given a time
to let one’s hair down…

perhaps it’s time to allow
strands to grow to lengths again
that require a hairpin…

then its un-letting…

a reason to raise arms high
then finger silver
tresses…

there should be no age that one
shouldn’t be able to
let one’s hair down before
she listens to her heart...


~*~

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
29 May 2002

© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-05-29 08:37 PM




WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is such an interesting and wonderfully creative write, sweet friend, I guess to let ones hair down contributes to the definition of a good hair day so to speak! (smiles) I agree with what you say here, sweet friend, I have never thought of hair this way before, I too always find a sense of freedom when hair is let down, I am growing mine out right now, this is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-05-29 08:47 PM


Even though hair is a subject that I don't
have much personal experience with (my own,
which is departing rapidly into the dark
abyss of baldness)...

Hair is a very sensual part of a woman..
and when she does...  when she lets her
hair down.....

Katie...bar the door...cause Magnus is
comin'....  so to speak...

This is an incredible poem....I could see
every sensual move,  feel every thought..

EXCELLENT!  Simply excellent!

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3 posted 2002-05-29 08:48 PM


Karilea

Yup, you got that right!  There is some things that time and style just can't change.  I have been letting mine grow for three years from short. Sometimes it is aggravating and I have to hide the scissors, but mostly, I'm glad.

icequeen
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4 posted 2002-05-29 10:31 PM


All of the aggravation of letting my hair grow out is now gone. I shall tape this to my mirror, so that when I feel like smashing the brush into it, I'll know why I'm not cutting it off again, even though I gotta keep those dryer fabric sheets in the drawer cause I've got enough static in my hair to run the television. Yep, mornings are dang scary around here.

Beautifully done, Sunshine!


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5 posted 2002-05-29 10:42 PM


Karilea, now this...this is very cleverly done ya know??  
Sure you do...and as for hair...
I've had the long and short of it and for now anyway....this is how it's stayin.
Just wish in the humidity it weren't so unruly.
I love the way you told this as though you were giving a talk on hair and your mind kept trailing off.....
~Hugs~

Bridget Shenachie
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6 posted 2002-05-30 02:37 AM


This is splendid and wonderfully worded.  I think that maybe some changes in your line breaks might add clarity.  This is - oh - so - good.

Shenachie

ethome
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7 posted 2002-05-30 06:17 AM


This is definitely Sunshine unique!   I can't keep up with you but I wish I could!
I'm hair today and gone tommorrow....and any other cliche I can decimate to ruin this perfectly good reply I started to make!


Forgive me!!
This is excellent!

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8 posted 2002-05-30 06:31 AM


ms sunshine, a morning pleasure to see
enjoyed you in this

jamesjiao
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9 posted 2002-05-30 07:04 AM


Tonnes of enjoyment reading this poem, it is more like an essay written on hairdo . I didn't know women are so troubled with their hair. Being a male, I never really cared about my own hairstyle much

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.



Nan
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10 posted 2002-05-30 07:53 AM


AHA - I knew there must be a reason why I don't like to wear my hair 'up'... Down & blowing in the wind for me, come what may...

I like this, K..

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11 posted 2002-05-30 10:32 AM


Whoa!
My initial thoughts would be censored, so ..
Wow!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Startime
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12 posted 2002-05-30 10:57 AM


SENSUALLY MAGNIFICENT....I LOVE IT...

Sunshine
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13 posted 2002-05-30 09:37 PM


No, Noah, don't be letting your hair grow...it'll just clog the sink...thanks for the read...

Magnus, I'll take your excellent and allow you a cinnamon roll...

Martie...playing with the idea of letting it grow again...and of course, there are the scissors...

icequeen, what a wonderful comment from someone who is just getting to know the PiP family...thank you!

Enchantress, I'm still looking for my mind..have you seen it?

Bridget, I shall bring this to the next meeting - bring your trusty red pen!

Ethome, that you came in to read means I shall forgive you for just about anything...pass the hairbrush...

DS, I enjoyed myself in this, too, even though my mind wandered a bit...

jamesjiao, I don't know that a lot of women are necessarily concerned about their hair much any more myself...I guess I'm from the old school...where grooming mattered...thanks for the eyes...

Nan...it liked me too!  So glad you came in!

Interloper...I don't see your initials anywhere...

Startime...as are you.  Thank you!

Madame Chipmunk
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14 posted 2002-05-30 11:53 PM


short does not allow for
letting one’s hair down

I love this uniquely beautiful poem, Karilea...
but I disagree with you on one thing...

I think women with short hair always have their hair down, because there is no way they can pin it up....
I have always found short hair to be very liberating.

~ hairy hugs

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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15 posted 2002-05-31 02:04 AM


BRAVO!!!
Dear sunshiny girl, this is unique, brilliant and witty a very well written piece, thanks for the read.
as for me, hair is short and there's no time for letting it down anyway
~HUGS~ sweetie
Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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16 posted 2002-05-31 09:36 AM


I love this one, Sunshine... I smiled every time thoughts wandered down sensual paths only to meet another ahem. *G* I work with a lot of women working in what is still mostly a man's world and a quick glance into an office sometimes isn't enough to recognize gender... but while my hair will never be long and luxurious, I can't make myself opt for the "professional" super short!
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