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A Wash
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A Wash |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
A Wash The cloud, along its base above the river, looked a sponge, and slowly darkened as though to bathe the long, taut arms of the irrigation pipes. Sun, glistening off the valves and shafts, glanced in her direction the rhythmic motion of shifting aluminum. With her hands she squeezed the cotton, wringing unison into the old-fashioned tub she insisted upon. RMW [This message has been edited by RMW (05-28-2002 04:58 PM).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You are just too good Gyrene  As usual, I loved it  |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Interloper ... and you, as all will agree, are too kind. Thanks, Sir. Bob |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you just really look at the whole of everything don't you?? well done Sir. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Sven ... thanks for the "observation". As always, good to hear from you. Bob |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now to put a cloud onto the form of a sponge...why do I like this so much...must be because the sun had an appearance as well...glinting off the tools and all... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I could actually see this..and it felt warm in a methodical sort of way that I really liked.. Soo good to read you. Sincerely, Reg |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Sunshine and Reg .... thanks for taking a moment to read and comment. I appreciate it. Bob |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob You see with a poet's eye. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Agree with all the above...really saw the image. jwesley |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Bump. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, you always write what you see so beautifully and fashion poetry so well and weave it to these pages! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cloudishness Junior Member
since 2002-05-27
Posts 15 |
Wow.... This is so good. Jim Sullivan |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Or, Awash! Good write, Bob. Livin' on a boat now, are ya? Cor |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
fantastic imagery! I loved this read. ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sometimes extended metaphor works, sometimes it doesn't - this definitely does. It's great..  K |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie, jwesley, Noah, Jim (welcome), Corinne, Icequeen, and Severn .... Sorry to be slow with expressing my thanks for your comments. I appreciate them ... and you, all. Bob |
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