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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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so long yesterday waiting, finally leaving evening comes and I find you there plotting the moments, conceiving the curves interruptions always, needing to care today with no sleep, I find the usual blocking me out, wearing me thin I can conspire, blueprint the wantings but what does it matter, I never can win so long it has been, so long it is now I am but baggage that no one would want tomorrows no different than yesterdays same so long as the air has the long of the taunt I hate this rhyming, but that's how it is fingers let loose what the mind has in feel worthiness empties, spills to recover the merit of value, so long as it's real. "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Look for value within. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
.......... [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (05-29-2002 05:32 AM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
so long as the pen can write. . .there will be words. . . and yet, are they ever enough?? you know the rest M. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Maureen darling girl this is wonderful writing it simply throbs with an ache threaded through it. Like beads of want linked to a need that is never satisfied and always denied. Your writing is often exquisite this is superb truly speaking writing, it converses with a soul. Outstanding darling girl it is outstanding and I love it utterly    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really liked this...and, by the way, I'm looking at your picture...and, as you stated in your well done poem....(the baggage nobody wants?)...I'm in the market for a briefcase just like you!!! LOL.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I, sven, Marsha, Toerag...I probably shouldn't have even written this one.. it's been a couple of rotten days... I, you are correct it is found within, but it never hurts to have the touch from without, Sven, I know you understand and Marsha...hugssss and xxxx for being there when needed and Toerag, I must admit you surprised me by leaving a mark..and I will keep mine brief for you..(since I don't really know you) but I think I maybe a bit too much for you..in case you haven't already heard.. *s just joshin' but thanks anyway  M |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssss) Oh Maureen, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I actually love this, for just that thought of being abandoned like lost luggage can relate to so many I'm sure! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
ahhh... a rotten couple of days always seems to be when I do my best writing. Anger works well too with my pen. Best way to get it out, you know. Well... you MUST know, because this is outstanding. I truly relate to it. Obviously you have value within, it pours out your pen, see? Yes..that's part of it right there...in the form of talent. ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
The spirit is wild and tempestuous, yet longs for the gentleness that seemingly lies just beyond reach, held at bay by the very soul that seeks its solace, and one holds oneself guiltly, alone by virtue of oneself; in reality we all batter ourselves when down, but step up we do again, some with a wild, tempestuous spirit that drive others around one to new heights..."baggage that no one wants"...gimme a break...you're the breathe that most want to breathe, the spirit most wish they had, and the totality of your loveliness is wonderful to behold. Cheer up, my friend...course you probably have already as I seriously doubt you stay down for long... warm hugs... jwesley |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Another gem...this one had such longing for freedom in it. The rhyme was fine. Bravo. |
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