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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA 
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on the same canvas made of my future. Watercolors in winter began shaping my face in shades of awesome passion with an incredible glow and a mouth the color of kissing Later came the oils applied with a rough brush washing away the joy - Two colors from your palette, one of dark sadness one of deep lonely combined to stain my eyes A fiery, bloody Why drawn across my lips flesh-glazed pain Even now, though I have lived on many walls my eyes still search the room for you unbelieving that you could forget the watercolors you left underneath © icequeen ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, I like the metaphor in this. Very well done Everything is possible in the game of life |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Thank you muchly Tracey!  |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
how sad, that the first was a picture that did you more justice than the second... someone really broke your heart. I can guess that you were happier back then and the second portrait is either the leaving or the hurting you endured. Powerful images ... you do your own painting here. Time to take the varnish and get busy. Love, Light and Peace, Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
As beautiful as I remember girl. That soft hush of writing... enormous hugs...my heart is glad..  K |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"a mouth the color of kissing" i love this line. the whole poem breathes softly to the end, where it has set the tone for the quiet saddness expressed in the final lines. well done Christopher |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent!!!! I will be sure to read more of your work. I laughed when I saw your name as I wrote this poem a few years back: The ice queen dances tonight, alone, while men watch to see her perform. Eyes of blue look right through them as she struts her stuff for all to see. Twirling, she moves, a picture of beauty and grace. The world becomes her stage, but her star burned out long ago. The ice queen dances tonight, the coldness in her heart put there by those who now wish only to possess her. Her glass slippers fail to carry the weight she has come to bare and they shatter like the illusions she once had. Frozen smile upon her face, she twists the truth to fit her expectations, lying only to herself. The ice queen dances tonight, alone, as you watch on. She performs for you. Cold, she has become. Watch how she moves ...just don’t touch or you’ll get burned. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Whoa! This is 1derful! I love it!  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
icequeen A wonderful write, I enjoyed the read. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is a superb poem ... constructed well with the right metaphors... The sadness aches in this poem, a measure of finality and firmness also comes in the ending.. Well done... |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
Fantastic! I'll be looking out for more.  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icequeen you captured the pain in this wonderfully done metaphor..great writing! |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
You all cannot know how lovely I feel right now! Magic - yes, he did break my heart, many years ago. I never quite got that "closure" I guess. Shrapnel always leaves an ache for later, no? But yes - I have that varnish in my hand Thanks for reading and for your sweet response! Severn - ohhhh Big BIG hugs to you too! I've so missed you! Your poetry is like chocolate, you know! Necessary!!! Christopher - I'll be digging out all of your work to read, dear! I've always enjoyed your writing. (btw - that's my favorite line too. Thank you - your opinion means much!) James - thanks so much for reading! Hoot - oh my gosh girl! I LOVE IT! I'm keeping a copy if its ok with you! Thanks! Interloper - Thank you so much - love your quote. I need to tape that on my wall! Seymour - Bless your heart for reading my scribbles Magnus - I'm swooning! A poet of your calibur likes my work - I'm grinning like a fool here!  Cirrus - oh my, thanks! I hope there is more to come. It's been so long since I've had the want to write. It's rather like learning to walk again. Martie - your poetry is among my very favorites ever, anytime, anywhere. I'm so delighted that you read and liked this poem of mine!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Even now, though I have lived on many walls my eyes still search the room for you unbelieving that you could forget the watercolors you left underneath ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ WHOA!!! Well this just blew me away! Incredible writing...and I shouldn't even try to pick and choose just a few lines here and there that are my favourite.... this entire piece is going into my library! I can see you are going to be one of my favs here! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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