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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
would you drive, awhile it’s after midnight top’s down wind’s dark not a single star more could fit the sky I can breathe, again you here beside me hand on the gearshift mine over yours you drive radio background to a night that lets me sleep passenger trusting in the song |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I like this Duncan..smooth, clear - and evocative... well done!  K |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Hey baby, good day for a drive...it's nice and sunny....I've got the MG out. What do you mean you're not up yet?...come on...I'm ready and waiting!! Lol Everything is possible in the game of life |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That particular trust that lies beneath this poem is sometimes very difficult to find...in your sleep, you have found it very well... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very relaxed, soothing feel to this piece Duncan...nice! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome ride, Duncan. Sandra |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Sounds like the perfect ride to me. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Thanks for the ride, Duncan... not a single star more could fit the sky I really loved this part of it.  ~ hugs from a backseat driverLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan, Well done message recieved. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Awwwww, I love the relaxing and comforting feel of this poem, sweet friend, what a wonderful feeling it is to lie beneath the stars side-by-side for a joy-ride with the one you love! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
sounds almost like... a dream, m'friend. like this, and have had dreams like this in the past. Peace, C |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Kellie, we do not post personal derrogatory remarks towards individuals at PIP. Please respect our rules....thank you The poem was good. I was expecting it to turn tragic at the end. Good use of structure and words. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (05-27-2002 11:14 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
not a single star more could fit the sky I can breathe, again you here beside me ============================ passenger trusting in the song =========================== well its about time you two found the right station and destination.   |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is one very cool poem. I love it! ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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leafseranade Member
since 2001-07-06
Posts 118Wisconsin, USA |
hey, sometimes we all have to be passengers and trust someone else to do the driving...just make sure not to nod off it they make a wrong turn. enjoyed this much! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Brings back memories Thanx. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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