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Plastic Dolls |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Plastic Dolls The dress you wear Seems shallow Next to the Transparency Of skin Where I reside I sit upon The framework Awaiting condemnation For a job Not so well done In empty eyes As you casually Shrug sweet epitomes Careless from Your designated shoulder In appeasement Of fake suggestion Litigation Of Embellishment Stands adjourned To casual affairs ~That make us Plastic dolls… Makes me wonder... who will be the first to burn... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... [This message has been edited by devina (05-25-2002 12:54 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is such wonderful and powerful poetry, sweet friend, this has a very haunting feel to it and it sounds sad, yet it incinerates with such originality and expression! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, your words always inspire me, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tanya, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
... hmm. had to read this three times to get the smell of burning plastic out of my nostrils!  digging deep, mixing the metaphor (very nice, extended a harsh, almost clinical tone) with the imagery (soft, translucent). A very vivid contrast. Works well with this style chick. Hugs |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Intense well written piece....evoking such emotional stimulation1 |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Devina~ A very interesting and thought provoking write, well done ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Um this just screams psycho...you know that right? j/k this had a much deeper meaning than I think even I can find but the search for it was interesting to say the least. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thought of tight fitted secretaries chewng on theor pencils waiting for their bosses to leave..fighting a mold that they find themselves into..good stuff here! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Noah- glad you find me so haunting sometimes...thought I was getting soft on the whole issue!!! Chris- Happy to know you agree with the style...you cynical lil thing...KNEW you would enjoy... *a little Christopher Robin told me*  ethome, tracie- thank you for the thoughts... Rob- yah, kinda got that feel myself...it's this small town syndrome choking me off- I just KNOW it!!!  Ty sweetsecrivan- You know, going back to read...it could very well be!! Thank you for your insight... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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BrandeeM Junior Member
since 2002-05-01
Posts 45 |
You've labeled the people of time with this...much enjoyed you!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhMyDevinaGal~ Smoldering write~ I love the way your poetic mind works ! Love you gal ... hey, thanks for the precious photos !!! Ooooooooh ..... so precious~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . this works very well. . . it finds a lot of images and emotions. . . great job. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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