Open Poetry #20 |
And Still The Willows Cry |
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
~* And Still The Still Willows Cry *~ They lived in troubling times, in those days of old. In spite of the fact that most knights were bold. lands became littered with castles and kings, cluttered with churches, whose bells didn’t ring. Those were days of mourning, a time to just sigh, As warriors in armor, on horseback stormed by. Ravaging the villages, for the sake of a cross, No conscience of another life they would toss. They’d kill the young, the old, and they knew death stained their arrows, fresh with the dew. Many would laugh after battle, living the lie, And the wind in the willows continued to cry. Their conscience had left them so long ago, in battles it mattered not to sling one more blow. They wouldn’t listen those knights in days of old, The stood up proud for their king, brave and bold. They should have listened to the willow’s cry, For those who hate instead of love, surly will die. ~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-24-2002 09:21 PM).] |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
That's an awesome story-poem thingy (I'm not one for technical names...just not my nature). I loved the imagery. I feel the same way about the religous battles like the crusades (I'm pretty sure that's what you're talking about here...correct me if I'm wrong) I thought what they did was very hipocritical that they preached to live like god and caused war. *darkstar* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Their conscience had left them so long ago... and I believe it's no different today for many... I love the tales of old. *s M |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
Oh my gosh, I LOVED this poem. It was absolutely FANTASTIC! It was beautiful. Every line I read, I had to stop and think of it and close my eyes and understand the beauty in each and every line. The picture at the top is spectacular! GREAT WRITE. This line caught my eye the most: Many would laugh after battle, living the lie, And the wind in the willows continued to cry. LadyPeach1 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This could be posted anywhere. It's about the dark side of human behavior, but presented in a fresh light. And we haven't really gotten past the dark ages yet, have we? Only the costumes have really changed. Well done poem! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Oh yes, Sharon....please do post this in open...... Their conscience had left them so long ago, in battles it mattered not to sling one more blow. It reminds me of the whole Palestinean-Israeli crisis and the suicide bombers....and of course also of 9/11. Although it is dark poetry, I think that those of us who usually post in Open would love a chance to read and comment on this piece. The imagery is so beautiful and the poem is so very well written. Posting it in Open will give it more play. ~ Open hugs Lyra |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Enjoyed this, Sharon...very well done. It would have been fine in open, and it is great here, as well. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
And it continues.. again and again and again... Someday we'll learn - I surely hope This is a keeper, Mysterias one... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You know you are writing of one of my most enjoyed parts of history... Sadly though, these were terrible times... My ancestors were driven from France to England ...by religious wars....Records of our ancestors stopped in the early 1600s because of these wars and the burning of churches and records... (Huguenots) They then migrated to the US in the 1600s to avoid religious persecution and possible death.. Yes, terrible times indeed...and you captured them well with your pen.. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sharon darling girl yet again darling heart you have written the perfect poem, flows like a dream, words etched in gold and the rhyme is utterly utterly divine. YOU know I love this one don’t you. Stunning piece of writing from you, utterly outstanding. The way you carried the theme through, so often your work is the epitome of style and form, In this you’ve written this so clearly so truthfully that the reader simply cannot ignore the problem and pretend it isn’t happening. The message comes through so well, the more things change the more they stay the same. Except there is hope and with writers like you to flag the issues we shall prevail. Absolutely excellent writing here well done darling girl Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mysteria! Your talents are showing! You have been developing your rhythm, and rhyme, but you continue to have that extra enchantment in taking the exact picture and mixing it with the right words... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Sharon, I too got the vision of the Crusades reading this, for those trying to regain the Holy Land to save their people! (sigh) It saddens me to see people choose to hate and bring sorrow and evil to others, sweet friend, I hope someday we can all be allies to one another shearts in love, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I'm so glad you decided to post this here, Sharon...it is very beautiful and this way it will get more exposure... ~ loving hugs Lyra |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
BRAVO!!!! Well done on an excellent write and an awesome read, very enjoyable...thanks for sharing with us and I love that graphic ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
As they say...live by the sword and die by the sword...James |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Mysteria! Into my library this keeper goes. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Thank you all for reading this one, combined my friend's name, with my favorite part of history, and hopefully a lesson and James Michael, you said it "bang" on! Thank you all. ~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh, how your mind does wind around the vines of truth and presnts them in a magical way. I miss you, dear, have been out of touch with the world, it seem, but my garden is beautiful. As is your poetry Loving hugs Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I love how you present this content with such excellent rhyme scheme and cadence! |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Sharon I echo all the above and I stand with much admiration and applaud with much exuberance. I sure appreciate your poetic talent. Maggie ((~.~)) |
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