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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Self imposed deadlines rent a day now from lifetimes recite every volume I’d ever write memorize each emotion I’d ever feel hear all the words not yet spoken touch the part of you that only I touch ask every question ever pondered say I love you as many times as I can nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room Seems the gods were just taunting bells in a pinball machine that only tilts pleasant noise, no points no token return, no going back no pretending I wasn’t warned no you never made any promises but I heard them, anyway nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room Back against the passenger side door impersonating sleep the road passes in simple black and light even looking back it’s still not easy to believe where we’ve been though clear now that we’re leaving and I’m not sure who’s driving but it’s not me nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room Knowing the end will not be changed just a rambling stall for time search for words I don’t want to say to take me away from a world I don’t want to leave into a vacancy no one wants try to make sense of one moment of us try to make sense of love nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room but I'm lonely now, and I don't know how |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...you never made any promises but I heard them, anyway... Funny, isn't it, how we read so much into someone else's actions, inactions, reactions... No Memorex moment, this... Good writing, Duncan...really, really good... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
no pretending I wasn’t warned no you never made any promises but I heard them, anyway ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Gosh Duncan, I feel so bad for you. Sometimes even when we are told early on in a situation...that what we want so bad may never happen....we don't hear because we want to believe that we can work it out. That by some miracle, or magic, our love will be strong enough to see us through anything. Gee, I wish you were closer and we could sit and talk, your porch or mine,...I can tell you are hurting, which of course is the sign of a very good writer as well.  This is one very powerful write. Extremely well done! ~Here's a (((Hug)))~ *If you ever want to talk, just email me.* ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Self imposed deadlines rent a day now from lifetimes recite every volume I'd ever write memorize each emotion I'd ever feel hear all the words not yet spoken touch the part of you that only I touch ask every question ever pondered say I love you as many times as I can ==================================== Back against the passenger side door impersonating sleep the road passes in simple black and light even looking back it's still not easy to believe where we've been though clear now that we're leaving and I'm not sure who's driving but it's not me ================================ Knowing the end will not be changed just a rambling stall for time search for words I don't want to say to take me away from a world I don't want to leave into a vacancy no one wants try to make sense of one moment of us try to make sense of love ================================== there are so many lines here that I have said to myself before... you dont often show us this much of your muse, and this is much more than a ramble, sometimes there wont be enough words to purge the pain or to help us understand the whys...and sometimes we must say all that needs to be said to begin the healing process. Some things shouldnt be distilled... and now the moth is rambling cuz she wishes she had some magic words so that you didnt have to learn this lesson. hugs D mothyme (saw the sig, cant go wrong with Rob along on the ride) I remembering being one and the same ... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Every line is a gem....I enjoyed this Duncan.  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
search for words I don’t want to say to take me away from a world I don’t want to leave into a vacancy no one wants I DEFINITELY want to write like you when I grow uP!!! |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
geez…the things you get up to when I’m at the pub!!…to much THINKING darlin!!! (hey, isn’t that my trick????) nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room I don't know...how many rum and cokes have ya had???? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Heart felt Duncan...muchly enjoyed.  K |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 I guess the room is always spinning, Duncan. You just gotta know when to jump on and off. Or maybe sometimes, not to jump on, but simply dream about the ride.Is that poetic injustice???? Hugs, and if Tracey is right, just put down that R&C! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Duncan, I can feel such sadness in your words, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you so much and your words are so powerful and honest and we are always here for you if you ever need someone to talk to and relate your feelings too! (sad sigh) I hope that very soon your vacant heart will be filled with all the joy you deserve so much, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
s'what i'm talking 'bout! a great start here duncan... let it pour, let it roll, let it ramble-stall as you beat your way to the door of new beginnings. i like the direction, i like the repetition, i like the possiblities folded in the corners of this. let it go, let it go - i see amazing things in your future - you will be a great jedi!  Peace, Chris |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Duncan...sometimes I think that we only hear what we want to hear, and even that can be open to misinterpretation.... you never made any promises but I heard them, anyway nothing will focus who’s spinning me or the room I think that both you and the room are spinning in different directions...  ~ sympathy hugsLyra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Ramble please some more my dear For I don’t want the time to pass Let me stay here just a while Not lost in emptiness And as you ramble, hold my hand Hold me next to you Never let the ramble end Then maybe we won’t too I know it’s after midnight…but, just one more  |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Knowing the end will not be changed just a rambling stall for time search for words I don’t want to say to take me away from a world I don’t want to leave into a vacancy no one wants try to make sense of one moment of us try to make sense of love `~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ wonderfull ramble ~~ Connie ~~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Geez, Duncan, another one that speaks of where I've been. You have an excellent style of sadness. Especially the line aout hearing promises not made. Wow, can I ever do that. I hear a whole happy future in one or two words sometimes. Take care, you. Sandra [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (05-25-2002 09:31 AM).] |
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