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Waves Ripple
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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Waves Ripple Waves ripple over me like fire, a burning deep within my soul It was for love I did aspire, allusive, unreachable goal My life is filled with mystery beneath calmest crystal waters Withdrawn from pain filled history, one of earth’s unwanted daughters A hope, a fantasy, such dreams, put sparkles of joy in my eyes But love’s not ever what it seems, if only I was one so wise Knowing better I took a chance, that he might want what I can give I felt it ending in advance, and now each moment I relive The fault lies firmly at my door, when I opened and let him in I should have learned from love before, and remembered I never win Waves ripple over me so fast with soothing as they wash me clean The pain within is not surpassed even though safely kept unseen Karen Torbiak ©2002 |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I don't think I'd be too hard on myself if I were you. Everyone has problems with that crazy little thing called love. Keep searching with your heart and it will happen when you least expect it! This is a beautiful honest poem as you are a very honest and open person!! Keep writing! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
StarTime~ Bittersweet and beautifully done~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Knowing better I took a chance, that he might want what I can give I felt it ending in advance, and now each moment I relive" Are ominious feelings at the start controlling the course of events? Maybe keep taking these chances, but visualize a different ending. Good to see you writing again. We've missed your star shining on these blue pages! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I think I know this scene .... sooner or later you feel a little waterlogged and have to find dry land. Your words are always stirring, but it is good to read you once more. Keep a smile! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
My life is filled with mystery beneath calmest crystal waters Withdrawn from pain filled history, one of earth’s unwanted daughters This is beautiful, Karen...and its so good to see you back here again.  ~ crystal hugsLyra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
To find and feel what is once given but never truly held can be most paining to any of us. Your words so deeply reflect the grasp and feel, and the loss...knowing that within the grasp there is emptiness though within the mind there is so much more... |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
liked it sad but well put arthur |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Karen darling girl this is wonderful writing it simply throbs with an ache threaded through it. I can feel the separation deep in my soul in this. You’ve written this so incredibly well. Not many people can write emotion as well as this it’s excellent. I’ve missed your delightful presence here darling girl, I hope now you’re back you’ll stay for awhile. This is utterly utterly Wonderful writing    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Karen, it’s been so long…where you been hiding?? Good to see you back again…pull up a chair…stay awhile!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Oh but maybe you will win the next time..James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh Karen, it is so true. Seeing the ending before it came, I understand, and know it hurts. Hugs Sandra |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karen How lovely to see your magical words gracing our pages once more. Yet another beautiful piece of your heart you have given us. Take care....Sue Suetang |
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