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Krissy
Senior Member

since 2002-02-22

Posts 556
kent England

0 posted 2002-05-23 06:39 PM

Sweet Surrender

When I look into your eyes
Those depth filled orbs
Of nights sigh
I see stars, shooting into
Spiralling wonder
I sink into their unspoken
Dreaming grace
Those whispering songs
Which tantalise
And tempt me into
Playing your game of
Sweet surrender

When I breathe in your breath
That gift of honeyed moan
Of sighing softness
That taste of sweet delight
That aches within a
Heartbeat a pulse throbbing
Hammering at the door
Of this need
This I must touch the taste
And taste the touch
Of surrenders reward

When I drown in your mouth
Gasping for air to
Ease the burning
And all consuming need
Wanting this but needing
So much more than just
The heat of your fire
I desire the flames
To leap within your
Eyes too
For you to know
All about the want of
Drowning in glorious
Surrender of soul

So taste the touch of
My heart and hear
The sound of my
Willing want of
Being with you
In sweet surrender

Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-05-23 06:49 PM

Krissy, this is simply awesome poetry...

The passion and yearning flow freely within
the lines to the final statement which so
easily leaves the reader in awe....

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2002-05-23 06:55 PM

Krissy what a lovely, longing and romantic poem done with such elegance and grace. I loved this one, and we needed some romance around here for a chance.

~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2002-05-23 07:14 PM

one could drown in your words *s

hugs
M

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2002-05-23 07:21 PM

Krissy,
This is wonderful poetry. An excellent read.
An epopee of surrender.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-05-23 07:31 PM

Wow I felt this...

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-05-23 07:34 PM

Mom still asleep? You sure she doesn't hear you tap, tap, tapping your heartpoems out? I like this...

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

7 posted 2002-05-23 07:38 PM

Krissy~

Very lovely.....Sweet surrender can sometimes be a great thing...

Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2002-05-23 07:52 PM

SweetKrissyGal~
It's said that tender hearts think alike ...
when I saw your title ... I was amazed, as I'd just finished one with the same title ... and was searching for a graphic for it .... Honest Injun !

I think I'll save it for a rainy day ...

I LOVE YOUR PIECE !!
It is soooooo tenderly written with the sincerity I've come to know from you~

Ooohhhhhhh, I cannot wait until September !!!
What fun we will all have together !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

9 posted 2002-05-23 10:14 PM

krissy...

goodness...this is one amazingly
beautiful poem...you have such a tender
way of writing that just warms the heart
and soul...and yet you posess a sense
of desire about you that would surely
make any man weak...beautiful write!!

love you.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

powerofthysword
Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 116
Glendale, AZ USA

10 posted 2002-05-23 10:26 PM

You delivered your meanings very vividly and
structures your paragraphs very well, I had
to read it 4 times to fully appreciate the
beauty in your heart, and now I see you are
a very compassionate person.

Staring into the sun just makes you blind to what beauty actually exists in the sky.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

11 posted 2002-05-23 11:55 PM

(sigh) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo passionately beautiful, sweet friend, I know this soft yearning ever so much for I too dream of being loved by my dream girl Joanna and sharing the stars and heavens with her! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krissy, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2002-05-24 03:52 AM

Simply fabulous...James

ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

13 posted 2002-05-24 07:51 AM

~raising the white flag~

what a lovely idea for a love poem, Kriss.
Your poetry, serious or softly romantic,
is always enchanting, always alluring.

It is a pleasure to surrender to them.
your friend, Jeff

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

14 posted 2002-05-24 11:46 AM

Sensually beautiful...your words are filled with the softest caress...how incredibly lovely...

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