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~Allie~
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since 2002-05-23
Posts 13
New York

0 posted 2002-05-23 05:09 PM


don't you see?
you don't know me
you only know what you hear
you only believe what is near

There is something i will never show
something you'll never know
It makes me look weak
my life has been tweaked

i wish to be strong
and for this i will long
why cant it disappear
and my conscience be cleared

for once i want to cry out my sadness
and only feel happiness
for everything i had
before all went bad

don't you see?
you don't know me
you only know what you hear
you only believe what is near

it will only bring me down
lower then the ground
when i think about it
i feel like [edited by moderator]

i hurt inside
i cant confide
inside i cry
no ones by my side

---i am alone---

---i cant trust---

trust did this to me
trust is my enemy
i wont make this mistake again
next time this might mean the end

i will wait for trust to find i
until then i will lie
to cover up my insane
caused by all this hurt and pain

don't you see?
you don't know me
you only know what you hear
you only believe what is near

don't even ask
just keep saying stuff behind my back
only remember you are nothing
just more hurt to add to my something

don't pretend to care
i will not share
my feelings wont subside
they will always be kept inside

just please don't say you know me
you only know what you hear
you only believe what is near.....

[This message has been edited by skyshine (05-23-2002 08:22 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2002-05-23 05:26 PM


trust in yourself.. I am not sure if this will be pulled or not for the use of profanity..but I wanted to tell you that you are the one who you can count on..don't   count on others for trust...(except your parents and adults  who love you)

hugs
M

Skyfire
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Riding
2 posted 2002-05-23 05:37 PM


Welcome to Passions! I think I'm going to enjoy your work
Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777
West Virginia
3 posted 2002-05-23 05:44 PM


Allie, goodness, you write of such sadness. You have yourself, Allie, that's what is most important. Allow yourself to trust...not everyone will hurt you. Though I know that's hard to see right now from where you stand. You did an excellent way of releasing your heart in this write. You write very well. Will look forward to reading more of yours.

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-05-23 05:55 PM




(BIG HUGGGSSSSS) Oh Allie, you have come to the right place, sweet friend, no matter what happens always stay true to yourself and your heart, for you are all you need and you are special and no one can ever change that! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a sad but wonderful debut! Welcome to Passions, sweet Allie, may you be inspired by all of us her as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! (sigh) I can't wait to read more of your lovely words! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-23-2002 05:56 PM).]

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-05-23 06:16 PM


Welcome to Passions Allie!
Very heartfelt first post.
Please acquaint yourself with the guidelines.
I look forward to more of your poems!
~Hugs, Nancy~

skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
6 posted 2002-05-23 08:23 PM


Very nicely done Allie, and powerfully written. Good work.

~sky

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2002-05-23 08:26 PM



Welcome to Passions, Allie!  A good, strong entrance into a wonderful poets home of all ages.  Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.


Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2002-05-23 08:35 PM


Allie,
Welcome enjoyed the read.

Magnus
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9 posted 2002-05-23 09:02 PM


Allie,  welcome to Passions...You just shared
a ton of thoughts and feelings...well
expressed...

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