Open Poetry #20 |
Theory of Glass |
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I did not notice how dark it had become When eyes are closed there are no fine lines between horizons and clouds even -when you are near I, can not meet your eyes without wanting to run-- That I might miss, the feeling of turning you into someone that has lost their religion-- the half empty, half full glass: theory If I am an island let the skies hold tender mercy- glimpses I can not describe to you in unwilling motion and unheard symphonies as if there are no words left- any where I will be the storm at sea when your hands have missed my touch circling the champagne glass in crystal perfection brilliant – fluting noise in theory the glass: half empty I would rather have one breath of his hair, one kiss of his mouth, one touch of his hand than an eternity without it. [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-23-2002 10:10 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so sad. That half empty champagne glass, I know it well. Excellent write, Lauren. Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren--You write feeling so well! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
...... Lauren.... sheesh. You're awesome. She said burn ... together. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What BSQ said. And then some. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
let me add my own hyperbolic elipsis here ..... this is breathtaking... and quite inspired on the crystal. really. storms at sea... wouldn't you think they'd fill a half empty glass? hugs you poet you |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sad sigh) Oh Lauren, this is soooooo very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all those who are castaways of love and I pray their hearts can be healed with a trip to true loves paradise! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
That I might miss, the feeling of turning you into someone that has lost their religion-- This IS inspired!!! This is so honestly intimate, Lauren...and the emotion is desperately desolate...I exit much impressed! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Just simply beautiful poetry.....You can gaze me out of my religion anytime Greeneyes......nice work! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You write with an angel's touch Lauren, every poem exquisite. M |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
read this out loud. . . just like it is. . . and you'll feel like you've just talked with eternity. . . yes. . . beautiful Lauren. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Lauren hi there Absolutely exquisite writing, I really do love your work, you are a writer of extraordinary skill, and this is incredibly beautiful. I could feel the emotions in this, it reached right into me Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I am an island let the skies hold tender mercy- glimpses I can not describe to you in unwilling motion and unheard symphonies as if there are no words left- any where I will be the storm at sea when your hands have missed my touch circling the champagne glass in crystal perfection ========================== time and time again....I read you and the the same 3 words whisper ... elegant, exquisite, enchanting,( you and your muse) I remembering being one and the same ... |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
GORGEOUS POEM, GREEN EYES!!!! Really...just a sensational piece of writing!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I wasn't able to reply to this earlier, but I just want to say that the second time I read this, I loved it even more! I know Karate, Kung Fu, and 47 other dangerous words |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
That emptiness holds so much .... what if the emptiness is all so fulfilling???? ... would you still storm?? Maybe ... than by the glass theory ... maybe not ... |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
Just a theory right? half of JAR |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
If I am an island let the skies hold tender mercy- glimpses I can not describe to you in unwilling motion and unheard symphonies as if there are no words left- any where softly written, Lauren...and beautifully too! ~ soft hugs Lyra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
but God hears you, and whispers "the glass, little one, is illusion; i never cared what name you give me; only that you learn that the glass is yours alone; empty or full, it exists only to you. can you not then see the glass full?" whispers of breeze carry His voice quiet, gentle, meaningful only to ears that choose to hear will you listen? beautiful writing, Lauren. -Dave |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I will be the storm at sea when your hands have missed my touch circling the champagne glass in crystal perfection brilliant – fluting noise in theory the glass: half empty Wow. Amazing piece of writing here Lauren. Truly inspired. I felt every word of this. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I love this, Lauren. I really do.. K |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your crystal glass is always overflowing with tender softness. This poem is rings with the clarity of purest passion. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sandra~ Thank you.....for understanding....hugsss ~~ Martie~ I really appreciate you coming by....hugsss ~~ BSQ~ you give me far to much credit....much thanks my friend.... ~~ Karilea~ I appreciate you, in more ways then one...thanks friend...hugsss ~~ Christopher~ Inspire...LOL not me....but thanks....a sea to fill half empty glasses, you'd think so....but.....smiles my friend...hugsss you... ~~ Noah~ for your tender replies always....hugsss ~~ Karen~ That's a gracious compliment...wow hon thanks much.....you added a smile here... HUGSSS ~~ Ethome~ thank you ever so much for stopping in to read....hugsss ~~ Maureen~ I am graced by your presence...thank you...hugssss ~~ Sven~ thank you for always being supportive...you are greatly appreciated... ~~ Krissy~ thanks my friend...hugssss ~~ Janet Marie~ thanks for being YOU! ~~ Ivy Rose~ HI there, thank you for your kind reply....smiles here....hugsss ~~ Skyfire~ thank you for stopping by twice, its much appreciated! ~~ Craig~ the mystery is always the storm....the glass...always half....luv ya.....HUGSSS ~~ JAR~ half an island....just a theory....but YOU know that.... ~~ Lyra~ luv ya hon.....thankyou for always bringing peace to these pages.... ~~ vandana~ THANK you.....hugsss lady.... ~~ Dave~ Softly....thank you for reminding me.... ~~ Tracey~ Hi there, its been awhile since ya have been here...good to see you and thanks for the sweet reply.....hugsssss ~ K~ thanks sweet lady.....very humbled by your reply....hugsssss ~~ Kacy~ hugssss to you.....thank you for such tender thoughts....and for your softness always..... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love to all....I really appreciate the responses and comments..... hugsssss be well and much Peace..... Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, How I have missed you and your poetry. Such a soft reminder why. This poem pleads for the kind of support I have been given. Please know I care. |
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