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D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2002-05-22 10:15 PM

I write from my imperfect heart to breathe fresh air.
When one opens the gate out of bounds
To question the norms of ones existence
Some will say he is pushing too far
But when one questions a purpose in life
Is it not a blessed event

Some say it is pompous to show my frailty
But are we not Gods children born imperfect
Or do I have to be trapped in a perfect body
For everyone to admire in front of
To only despise in the shadows of truth

Are not poets the thinkers who open up the clouds
Pouring in us the feeling of being so human
For us to cry our thoughts for people to make songs from
To elevate so beautifully and then deflate so fast we bruise
Carrying the feeling of the blues in reality

My perfection lies in everything I have done wrong
And had to do a u-turn so fast that my head spins
Off in another direction as if a top
Balancing on a wire

If I ever met an unblemished poet
Then I would really have a politician in front of me
And their words will run so shallow
That the mirror they look from
Would vote for themselves

So as some have said
I am pretentious in my verse
That would put a crown on me
Putting me into the royalty of poets
When all I want is for my verse to live free
Opening up in unhindered minds
Letting them ascend the throne
And leave me begging to be understood

A challenge defeatist some claim
On that they are right
For who am I to change anything
Gross self-indulgence running amok
Am I not a sinner in pain
Preaching in words that anyone can use
Trying to put them together in a puzzle of life

So why must I scream my words into you
I don’t for they must flow into you
Reaching points of your choosing
On interpretations that might be different
With every person that reads them

So when I finally meet my soulmate
She will love me for everything I do wrong
But try to make right
She will lay next to me and feel my depth
Glowing inside as I question the world of emotions
Coming back to her for reassurance
That she gives like no other
For she will be the one I really write for
To be understood
Email me at [email protected]
D.Lester Young (05/22/02)
Tuscaloosa, AL
Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry) http://www.authorsden.com/visit/author.asp?AuthorID=5012

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-05-23 03:30 PM

pretentious? Naw...having a burning need to give voice to the unspeakable is not pretention...it's poetry my friend..and yours is lovely!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2002-05-23 04:09 PM

I have to agree with Celeste (Serenity) on this one.....lovely poetry!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2002-05-23 04:22 PM

So when I finally meet my soulmate
She will love me for everything I do wrong
But try to make right
She will lay next to me and feel my depth
Glowing inside as I question the world of emotions
Coming back to her for reassurance
That she gives like no other
For she will be the one I really write for
To be understood

So true...there were several verses I loved this and one other:

So as some have said
I am pretentious in my verse
That would put a crown on me
Putting me into the royalty of poets
When all I want is for my verse to live free
Opening up in unhindered minds
Letting them ascend the throne
And leave me begging to be understood

I really enjoyed your words DLY *s
M

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