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| Open Poetry #20 |
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Soft the Bell of Vespertine |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
When darkness fell there rang a bell, As nature knelt in silent praise, Of day's demise in western skies, To passing of sun's piercing rays. Came Luna's glow on earth below, Encaptured all in moon's enthrall, Upon the land as tender hand, Of eventide did softly fall. Rang soft the bell as night befell, Bestowing both on man and beast, Peace undefiled, by stars beguiled, From heaven's font all sins released. Rang heralder of night divine, Rang soft the bell of vespertine. [This message has been edited by Tim (05-21-2002 07:03 PM).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Beautiful. And one of my favorite words..vespertine. Soft flow..message of hope. Sincerely, Reg |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
your rhyme is excellent, your scheme well executed, but that's just my humble opinion, just reads so well. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I do so enjoy your passion with the word vespertine - it always adds a quality to your poetry that no one else can touch... thank you... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tim I wish I could see it in the beauty that you do. So lovely! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! Oh Tim, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I absolutely love this vision, just the thought of standing on heavens belfry and ringing these sweet bells to the world makes me smile with the angels! (big hugggsssssss) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
I just loved this to pieces. It made me feel all warm and snuggly. Like I was rocking in a hammock on a night drenched with moonlight. Wonderful, just wonderful. Hugs, Marti " My wrinkles are badges of courage and reveal that I am a Mother." |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
generally not much on rhyming poems, but this one grabbed and held. the tone fits well with what seemed to me a smooth flow. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is a delightful traditional style poem. Excellent rhyme scheme with tender images in each ine! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Tim, this is stunning! It took my breath away, the internal rhyme and the flow - magnificent Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A "soft" bell.. what a nice visage..  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Amazing..... Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
Beautiful! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so lovely in every way The theme, the tone of the poem, your meter and rhyme, everything perfect! Loved this! Liz |
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