Open Poetry #20 |
Whispers |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Whispers The wind whispers in my ear To try the bars of mortals fear. To look upon the battle field And see the scares for what they yield. Walk among the ghosts of then Place some garlands on the when Air the tears and let them fall Spill the waste of duties call. Search the inner lies of bright The dark in the Vail of night Gaze upon their stand and files Then look again the crosses miles. Stir the acid of power or Never ever will it flower? Let fly the spirit of the range Give honor to the things that change. But never, ever, spare the dare Or back away the life you share. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sy, I like this much..well done sir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
quote: This time I like THIS part best... Nice write, dear Sy.. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A beautiful write ... full of wisdom Sy, very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy oh my stars this is utterly utterly one of your best ever. This flows like liquid honey, sweet and as smooth as silk. Truly awesome writing, you never disappoint the reader darling boy, and this reader, in particular is always delighted by all you write. Even if it’s quality is immeasurably superior to my own I forgive you for being such a fine writer. Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 [This message has been edited by Marsha (04-11-2002 08:12 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Walk among the ghosts of then Place some garlands on the when Air the tears and let them fall Spill the waste of duties call. Search the inner lies of bright The dark in the Vail of night Gaze upon their stand and files Then look again the crosses miles. =================================== Let fly the spirit of the range Give honor to the things that change. But never, ever, spare the dare Or back away the life you share. ====================================== Stinkylove, there are so many impressive lines in this haunted write of the scars of war. Written with classic Sy-babes cadence and wisdom...with imagery that is sharp and cutting edge...and always those closing couplets from your soul's window allowing us the view of your mind's moments of "poetic way coolness." I must sound like a broken record here each morning, but your writing is consistantly outstanding and impressive each day...I've simply run out of adjectives to do you justice but never out of *winkies* OR SY SMOOCHES *L* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger, Thank you for the well done. Nice comment dear Nan. Kit, Thank you for the very much. See you soon. Marsha, I can't believe it's not butter. Thank you twice. JM, Never get tired of your syrup on my poetry. *winkies* OR JM SMOOCHES |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You bring a word from close my heart a whisper gold that would impart the slip of veil in paler vales with imagery that lingers in my start thank you for this, Sy.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, And thank you for the light you shine. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Like this Sy...always such a message within your words...very skillful. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Stir the acid of power or Never ever will it flower? Let fly the spirit of the range Give honor to the things that change. Very powerful writing, Sy... ~acid hugs~ LOL copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
much enjoyed Sy! Martin |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Whipsering, I liked those last two lines especially so..... It was all good!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Magnus. Lyra, Hugs back and a Ecrivan, Thank you. BlueSerenade, Good is good, thank you. |
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